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Write a response in which you discussed the extent to which you agree 70O9n
People are divergent in an analysis of the job or activity. Some of them are very meticulous about the possibilities of consequences faced for the task. While others are slapdash that is without the awareness of the difficulties faced later. Both have pros and cons. In the prompt, it is stated that people should carefully analyse the problems that are present in the job only after that they should take up the task. I believe sometimes you should carefully consider the consequences while sometimes even if you are completely accurate about the problems you will always find more. Sometimes for a dangerous task and you must be careful without proper instructions and consideration of challenges it is a dangerous task. For instance, In the Amazon Forest, you must be careful with proper instructions and consideration of challenges for the adventure, there was a place, and some of the people were amateurs and without analysis of the challenges, they started trekking. After the Trek, their Legs were fully swollen as they were unaware that there were leeches in the forest. Hence, for a risky task, you must be aware of the possibilities that are going to be faced. On the other hand, even if you carefully considering the consequences there might be more of them to be faced and you never know until you take the risk. To Illustrate, Space X is an aerospace company in year 2014 it launched a spaceship with all consideration of the difficulties that are going to be faced but there was a crash that occurred in the system and people died. After the failure, they found unfamiliar problems, and at last, they were successful. Therefore, even if you are fully aware of the consequences there might be more of them and better take the risk. In Conclusion, the prompt states only after the consideration of outcomes you should take up the risky action. Although, some of the times you must be aware of the challenges before taking the action. Even you are fully aware of the problems there might be more so it is better to take the risk for some.
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People
are divergent in an analysis of the job or activity.
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Some
of them are
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very
meticulous about the possibilities of consequences
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faced
for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
task
.
“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
others are slapdash
that is
without the awareness of the difficulties
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faced
later. Both have pros and cons. In the prompt, it
is stated
that
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people
should
carefully
Possible spelling mistake. 'analyse' is British English.
analyse
the
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problems
that are present in the job
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
after that they should take up the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
task
. I believe
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
you should
carefully
consider the
The usual preposition to use after "consequences" is not "while". Did you mean "consequences of", "consequences for", or "consequences on"?
consequences while
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
even if you are completely accurate about the
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problems
you will always find more.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Sometimes
for a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
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task
and you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be careful without proper instructions and
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consideration
of
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challenges
it is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
task
.
For instance
, In the Amazon Forest, you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be careful with proper instructions and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
consideration
of
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challenges
for the adventure, there was a place, and
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
were amateurs and without analysis of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
challenges
, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
trekking. After the Trek, their Legs were
fully
swollen as they were unaware that there were leeches in the forest.
Hence
, for a risky
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
task
, you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be
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aware
of the possibilities that are going to
be faced
.

On the other hand
, even if you
carefully
considering the consequences there might be more of them to be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
faced
and you never know until you take the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
. To Illustrate,
Did you mean "SpaceX" (= aerospace company)?
Space X
is an aerospace
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in year 2014 it launched a spaceship with all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
consideration
of the difficulties that are going to be
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faced
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but
there was a crash that occurred in the system and
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people
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died
. After the failure, they found unfamiliar
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problems
, and at last, they were successful.
Therefore
, even if you are
fully
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aware
of the consequences there might be more of them and better take the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
.

In Conclusion
, the prompt states
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
after the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
consideration
of outcomes you should take up the risky action. Although,
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
times you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
aware
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
challenges
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
taking the action. Even you are
fully
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aware
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
there might be more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it is better to take the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
.
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IELTS essay Write a response in which you discussed the extent to which you agree

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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