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Write a paragraph describing your dream job, a job you would like to have. Give reasons to support your ideas

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When I was little I loved to make handmade things. Because of my ingenuity, my dream is to become a craftsman. I was in middle school, my favorite subject was crafting and i I won second place in a school craft competition. The special skill I learned from crafting is can showcase my creativity, ingenuity, sophistication and taste to end up with a unique piece like no other. And hand-made items are different from the popular machine-made items today. Each hand-made work shows the creativity and meticulousness of its maker. The items I love to make are dreamcatcher, knitting scarf, keychain. My dream is to open a small shop to sell these cute handmade things. This dream is difficult in the long run but it's a dream so I want to try to pursue it.
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of my ingenuity, my
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is to become a craftsman. I was in middle school, my favorite subject was crafting and
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won second place in a school craft competition. The special
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skill
I learned from crafting is can showcase my creativity, ingenuity, sophistication and taste to
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end
up with a unique piece like no other. And hand-made items are
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different
from the popular machine-made items
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today
. Each hand-made work
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shows
the creativity and meticulousness of its maker. The items I
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love
to
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dreamcatcher
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keychain
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is to open a
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shop to sell these cute
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handmade
things. This
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dream
is difficult in the long run
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I want to try to pursue it.

IELTS essay Write a paragraph describing your dream job, a job you would like to have. Give reasons to support your ideas

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
135 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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