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Write a paragraph about your leisure activity and the reasons why you enjoy doing it

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My favourite leisure activity is reading. I like reading because it is a hobby that is useful and interesting: useful because you can find a lot of knowledge of all areas that you need; interesting because the books can give you the joy and help you relax after a day of toil etc. . . Especially, when you join the forum, you can meet a lot of people who have interests similar to yours, comment on the books or novels that interest you. I love books and also natural as reading books. At the age of ten, I was awarded "The Scarlet Sails" of Alexandre Green by my grandfather. It is the first of book that I have been. I read it does not know how many times (Up to now, I still love it and occasionally read it again). My love for books begun. I usually spend almost of free time in choosing the book with my friends, participate in dicussion on the forum and reading (of course! ). Every weekend and all holidays when I have no work to do, I often read books and ruminate on it. I also help some friends can select the genres of books that they like. I always hope that I will have my own library in my future. I love books very much and perhaps, I couldn't live without them.
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because
you can find
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a lot of
knowledge of all areas that you need; interesting
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because
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books
can give you the joy and
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help
you relax after a day of toil etc.
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join
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meet
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a lot of
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people
who have interests similar to yours, comment on the
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books
or novels that interest you.

I
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love
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books
and
also
natural as
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reading
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books
. At the age of ten, I
was awarded
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The Scarlet Sails
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of Alexandre Green by my grandfather. It is the
first
of
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book
that I have been. I read it does not know how
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many
times (Up to
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now
, I
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love
it and
occasionally
read it again). My
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begun.

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usually
spend almost of free time in choosing the
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with my friends, participate in
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dicussion
on the forum and
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reading
(
of course
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. Every weekend and all holidays when I have no work to do, I
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often
read
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books
and ruminate on it. I
also
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help
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some
friends can select the genres of
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books
that they like.

I always hope that I will have my
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own
library in my future.
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love
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books
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very
much and perhaps, I couldn't
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live
without them.
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IELTS essay Write a paragraph about your leisure activity and the reasons why you enjoy doing it

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
229 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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