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WRITE A PARAGHRAP ABOUT FRIGHTENING EXPERIENCE

WRITE A PARAGHRAP ABOUT FRIGHTENING EXPERIENCE okYlg
I can never forget that day. That was when i was little I was really scared of the dark. One night, i have to look after the house alone because my parents need to go to my Aunt's house. While i was listening to music in the living, suddently it started to rained heavily so i went outside to close the door. right after the moment i locked the door a black covered the whole house, it was a power outage, my fear of the dark arose I crouched down to sit still, not daring to move, I could clearly hear the thunder and the sound of branches tree hit the window. I was sitting Like that till i heard a knock door i was so scared to open the door. Then i heard my mother calling me to open the door at the same time the electricity came back on. I felt like i been rescue from the death.
I can never forget that day. That was when
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really
scared of the dark. One night,
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i
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have to
look after the
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house
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because
my parents need to go to my Aunt's
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house
. While
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i
was listening to music in the living,
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suddently
it
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started
to rained
heavily
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so
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i
went outside to close the
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door
.
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right
after the moment
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i
locked the
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door
a black covered the whole
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house
, it was a power outage, my fear of the dark arose I crouched down to sit
still
, not daring to
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move
, I could
clearly
hear the thunder and the sound of branches tree hit the window. I was sitting Like that till
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i
heard a knock
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door
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i
was
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so
scared to open the
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door
. Then
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i
heard my mother calling me to open the
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door
at the same time the electricity came back on. I felt like
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i
been rescue from the death.

IELTS essay WRITE A PARAGHRAP ABOUT FRIGHTENING EXPERIENCE

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
160 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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