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Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● thank them for the photos and for the holiday ● explain why you didn’t write earlier ● invite them to come and stay with you. v.1

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● thank them for the photos and for the holiday ● explain why you didn’t write earlier ● invite them to come and stay with you. v. 1
Dear Maria, I hope this letter finds you well, even after three months later to my holiday that I spent with you, I'm still remembering and cherishing those beautiful moments and I hope you also feel the same way. I must thank you for the photographs that you have mailed me and I'm sorry that I could not write back to you sooner. I received the courier package with the pictures on December 16, 2019. Aunty Carol was ecstatic to see how big you have grown up and pictures were filled with flamboyant colours. After looking at it, I'm starting to think of getting professional photography lessons from you. The vacation was indeed a silver line of dark sky for me, where I was able to enjoy some quality time away from a busy work schedule. I would have never planned anything at such magnitude, If you were not there. Please accept my apology in not writing back to you sooner, the truth was after I resume work I had to move to Amsterdam for an official visit. It was not pre-planned instead it was a spontaneous decision of the company management that I work for. However, I should have written to you, but despite the attempts all went futile in front of the job I am performing. In the coming summer, I might retire from work and I would like to see you here with us to spend few weeks together. After all, collage is also giving vacation, it will be perfect timing for you too. The weather is nice in summer time and I'm sure we could have a nice time together. To recapitulate further, I am in debt for your hospitality and look forward to hosting you in coming June. Thanks, Uncle Sam.
Dear Maria,

I hope this letter finds you well, even after three months later to my holiday that I spent with you, I'm
still
remembering and cherishing those
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
moments and I hope you
also
feel the same way. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
thank you for the photographs that you have mailed me and I'm sorry that I could not write back to you sooner.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
received the courier package with the pictures on December 16, 2019. Aunty Carol was ecstatic to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
you have grown up and pictures
were filled
with flamboyant
Possible spelling mistake. 'colours' is British English.
colours
. After looking at it, I'm starting to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
of getting professional photography lessons from you. The vacation was
indeed
a silver line of dark sky for me, where I was able to enjoy
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
quality time away from a busy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
schedule. I would have never planned anything at such magnitude, If you were not there.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
accept my apology in not writing back to you sooner, the truth was after I resume
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
I had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to Amsterdam for an official visit. It was not
Possible spelling mistake found.
pre-planned
instead
it was a spontaneous decision of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
management that I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
for.
However
, I should have written to you,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
despite the attempts all went futile in front of the job I am performing.

In the coming summer, I might retire from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
and I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you here with us to spend few weeks together.
After all
, collage is
also
giving vacation, it will be perfect timing for you too. The weather is nice in
Consider using "summer".
summer time
and I'm sure we could have a nice time together.

To recapitulate
further
, I am in debt for your hospitality and look forward to hosting you in coming June.

Thanks,

Uncle Sam.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● thank them for the photos and for the holiday ● explain why you didn’t write earlier ● invite them to come and stay with you. v. 1

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
296 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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