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write 250 words. People are buying same products and countries are being similar.agree or disagree?

write 250 words. People are buying same products and countries are being similar. agree or disagree? gbDBL
Thanks to the advent of globalization, international corporations have opened their branches in every corner of the world. Consequently, the same products are available everywhere and this has made people and countries look the same. In my opinion, this is not exactly a positive change. I will support my stand with valid arguments in the following paragraphs. First of all, when people everywhere buy the same products, cultural identities disappear. For example, in Shanghai, many foreign clothing companies sell T-shirts to local residents. As a result, few local people wear traditional clothes like qipao now and the traditional clothing industry is dying. Many young people cannot even identify their traditional clothing and fewer people know how to make traditional clothes. If the government took actions to help the traditional clothing industry, people would be able to keep their cultural heritage and craftsmen working in this sector would not lose their livelihood. Unfortunately, that is not the case and locals are forgetting their culture and ethnicity. On top of this, buying the same stuff everywhere is bad for local economies and the environment. Oftentimes, products are imported from foreign countries and have to travel thousands of miles before they reach the end user. This does not help the environment or the local craftsmen. The only beneficiaries are multinational companies. Small businesses and manufactures cannot compete with them and quickly lose their market share and there is less demand for skilled workers who can produce goods with local features. Consequently, people employed in traditional sectors are becoming jobless. For instance, the young generation prefers fast food rather than traditional Chinese food. The market is shrunk for these people who make a living by selling traditional Chinese foods. Likewise, carpenters, cobblers, potters are all becoming jobless in the current scenario. To sum up, the disadvantages overweigh the benefits when people begin to buy the same goods everywhere and different regions become more and more similar. In this scenario, the cultural heritage will be destroyed and the unemployment rate will rise.
Thanks to the advent of globalization, international corporations have opened their branches in every corner of the world.
Consequently
, the same products are available
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everywhere
and this has made
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people
and countries look the same. In my opinion, this is not exactly a
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positive
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change
. I will support my stand with valid arguments in the following paragraphs.

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First of all
, when
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people
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everywhere
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buy
the same products, cultural identities disappear.
For example
, in Shanghai,
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many
foreign clothing
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companies
sell T-shirts to
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local
residents.
As a result
, few
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local
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people
wear
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traditional
clothes like
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qipao
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now
and the
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traditional
clothing industry is dying.
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Many
young
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people
cannot even identify their
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traditional
clothing and fewer
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people
know how to
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make
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traditional
clothes. If the
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government
took actions to
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help
the
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traditional
clothing industry,
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people
would be able to
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keep
their cultural heritage and craftsmen working in this sector would not lose their livelihood. Unfortunately,
that is
not the case and
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locals
are forgetting their culture and ethnicity.

On top of this, buying the same stuff
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everywhere
is
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bad
for
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local
economies and the environment. Oftentimes, products
are imported
from foreign countries and
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have to
travel thousands of miles
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before
they reach the
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end
user. This does not
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help
the environment or the
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local
craftsmen. The
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only
beneficiaries are multinational
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companies
.
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Small
businesses and manufactures cannot compete with them and
quickly
lose their market share and there is less demand for skilled workers who can produce
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goods
with
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local
features.
Consequently
,
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people
employed in
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traditional
sectors are becoming jobless.
For instance
, the young generation prefers
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fast
food
rather
than
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traditional
Chinese food. The market
is shrunk
for these
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people
who
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make
a living by selling
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traditional
Chinese foods.
Likewise
, carpenters, cobblers, potters are all becoming jobless in the
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current
scenario.

To sum up, the disadvantages
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overweigh
the benefits when
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people
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begin
to
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buy
the same
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goods
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everywhere
and
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different
regions become more and more similar. In this scenario, the cultural heritage will be
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destroyed
and the unemployment rate will rise.
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IELTS essay write 250 words. People are buying same products and countries are being similar. agree or disagree?

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