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Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartmentbuilding? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice. v.1

Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartmentbuilding? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice. v. 1
Convenience food has been increasingly popular among in the modern world because it is easy to eat and easy to prepare. Especially in this day, many people do not have much hour to cook traditional meal and turn to eat prepackaged food, but others people believe that kind of cuisine are less nutrients. In my view, foods are very important for living of human, thus it's very important to eat a meal which has more nutrient. Traditional foods use a lot of time to prepare, therefore many people turn to find the foods which are more convenient to consume. This kind of foods is a good invention that makes them live longer, yet almost of them have not much essential nutrient of our body. This day we are a lot restaurant and you can buy foodstuff from them by not lose your time to prepare. For instance, near my workplace, there are many local restaurants, I usually order it from them and select the meal that do not spend much time to cook. It may take a while more than constant meals, but not much, more over it fresher than complete meal. Delicious taste is crucial, but it usually takes hours to prepare. Furthermore, frozen meal can just only make easy meal and usually reduce some ingredient that make it difficult to cook. As a result, it cannot make every kind of meal that we want to eat and may not well like fresh cuisine that make by traditional style. For instance, pizza from corner store are dumb and not crisp like the pizza that cook with conventional style. In conclusion, in the future, the latter may be dominated than the former because it's cheaper. But convenience food will not be instead traditional foodstuff due to nutrient and palatable taste.
Convenience
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food
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increasingly
popular among in the modern world
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because
it is easy to
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eat
and easy to
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prepare
.
Especially
in this day,
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many
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people
do not have
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much
hour to cook traditional
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meal
and turn to
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eat
prepackaged
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food
,
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but
others
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people
believe that kind of cuisine are
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less
nutrients. In my view,
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foods
are
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very
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important
for living of human,
thus
it's
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very
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important
to
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eat
a
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meal
which has more nutrient.

Traditional
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foods
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use
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a lot of
time to
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prepare
,
therefore
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many
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people
turn to find the
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foods
which are more convenient to consume. This kind of
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foods
is a
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good
invention that
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makes
them
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live
longer,
yet
almost of them have not
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much
essential nutrient of our body. This day we are a lot restaurant and you can
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buy
foodstuff from them by not lose your time to
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prepare
.
For instance
, near my workplace, there are
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many
local restaurants, I
usually
order it from them and select the
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meal
that do not spend
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much
time to cook. It may take a while more than constant
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meals
,
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but
not
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much
, more over it fresher than complete meal.

Delicious taste is crucial,
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but
it
usually
takes hours to
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prepare
.
Furthermore
, frozen
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meal
can
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just
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only
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make
easy
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meal
and
usually
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reduce
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some
ingredient that
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make
it difficult to cook.
As a result
, it cannot
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make
every kind of
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meal
that we want to
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eat
and may not well like fresh cuisine that
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make
by traditional style.
For instance
, pizza from corner store are dumb and not crisp like the pizza that cook with conventional style.

In conclusion
, in the future, the latter may
be dominated
than the former
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because
it's cheaper.
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But
convenience
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food
will not be
instead
traditional foodstuff due to nutrient and palatable taste.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartmentbuilding? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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