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Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender? 7qjA
Genders usually seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. While men and women have different physical qualities, their gender should not hinder their ability to do certain professions. This essay will discuss why it is not right to exclude males or females from particular job because of their gender identity. Society has always perceived gender as a determining factor of someone’s capabilities. In the old times, women were seen as an emotional, soft, and domesticated individuals who should not be involved in rigorous work, or any job that is known being done by men. For example, In the middle east, women are not allowed to drive simply because they are females as it is believed that men should always take the wheel. They are also not allowed to join the military or police workforce since they think it is only a man’s job. Likewise, men cannot be a hairdresser or make-up artist because they distinguish it as a woman’s job. Hence, this kind of perception has let men and women to compartmentalize themselves on the jobs that they should and should not do. Conversely, in modern and progressive countries such as in Asia, Europe, and Americas, women and men are now treated equally which I believe is fair and just. It is true that women are more emotional than men, but it does not mean that women cannot do a man’s job. The capabilities of a man can be equally possessed by women as they are also determined and strong individuals. For example, NASA has been recruiting women to go in space, Police and military academy have accepted women enrollees in their campus, High positions in the government have also been filled in by women. In fact, some countries have elected women leaders to rule their country. This paradigm is only an indication that it is irrelevant and unjustly to exclude certain genders from a particular profession because men and women are equal. In conclusion, society sees men and women as two different individuals with diverse strengths and weaknesses. While physical attributes may vary for men and women, their strong and weak points should not prevent them to do the job they like regardless of their gender. In my opinion, there is no job in the world that women and men cannot do together. Therefore, all jobs should accept any individuals irrespective of their gender identity.
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strengths and weaknesses. While
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men
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women
have
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different
physical qualities, their gender should not hinder their ability to do certain professions. This essay will discuss why it is not right to exclude males or females from particular
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job
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because
of their gender identity.

Society has always perceived gender as a determining factor of someone’s capabilities. In the
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old
times,
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women
were
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seen
as an emotional, soft, and domesticated
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individuals
who should not
be involved
in rigorous work, or any
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job
that
is known
being done
by
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men
.
For example
, In the
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middle east
,
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women
are not
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allowed
to drive
simply
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because
they are females as it
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men
should always take the wheel. They are
also
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join
the military or police workforce since they
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’s
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job
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Likewise
,
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men
cannot be a hairdresser or
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make
-up artist
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because
they distinguish it as a woman’s
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job
.
Hence
, this kind of perception has
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let
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men
and
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women
to compartmentalize themselves on the
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jobs
that they should and should not do.

Conversely
, in modern and progressive countries such as in Asia, Europe, and Americas,
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women
and
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men
are
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now
treated
equally
which I believe is
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fair
and
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just
. It is true that
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women
are more emotional than
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men
,
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but
it does not mean that
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women
cannot do a
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man
’s
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job
. The capabilities of a
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man
can be
equally
possessed by
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women
as they are
also
determined and strong
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individuals
.
For example
, NASA has been recruiting
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women
to go in space, Police and military academy have
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accepted
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women
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enrollees
in their campus, High positions in the
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government
have
also
been filled
in by
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women
. In fact,
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some
countries have elected
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women
leaders to
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rule
their country. This paradigm is
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only
an indication that it is irrelevant and
unjustly
to exclude certain genders from a particular profession
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because
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men
and
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women
are equal.

In conclusion
, society
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sees
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men
and
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women
as two
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different
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individuals
with diverse strengths and weaknesses. While physical attributes may vary for
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men
and
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women
, their strong and weak points should not
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prevent
them to do the
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job
they like regardless of their gender. In my opinion, there is no
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job
in the world that
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women
and
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men
cannot do together.
Therefore
, all
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jobs
should accept any
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individuals
irrespective of their gender identity.
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IELTS essay Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
396 words
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