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With urbanization and increasing population, the transport system is facing problems. Some argue that governments should spend more money building and upgrading railways instead of roads. I strongly agree with this opinion.

With urbanization and increasing population, the transport system is facing problems. Some argue that governments should spend more money building and upgrading railways instead of roads. I strongly agree with this opinion. 2r7lx
With urbanization and increasing population, the transport system is facing problems. Some argue that governments should spend more money building and upgrading railways instead of roads. I strongly agree with this opinion. One on the hand, the improvement of railway lines brought positive effects. First, the transportation of goods will have many benefits. Locomotives can carry tons of goods to so many different cities and regions, while cars or trucks are not capable of doing this. Secondly, investing money in commuter rail is considered an important economic decision, good facilities and reasonable fares make it easy for the majority of people to travel, especially to their hometown or region. remote areas. Finally, this means of transport contributes to limiting environmental pollution. Compared with road transport, trains cause less fossil fuel combustion and emissions than other means of transport. Investing in a modern tram system will bring many benefits to individuals. People can travel faster because they don't have to struggle with the congestion most commuters experience. Trains can reach much higher speeds than cars, and as a result, it takes people less time to get around. In addition, traveling will be more comfortable because guests can enjoy the scenery along the railway. Meanwhile, driving or riding a motorbike in heavy traffic can seem much more stressful. for example, every time on holiday I usually choose to take the train to go home because it only takes 4 hours, in addition, I can see the sea and feel much safer while the car is 8 hours and has many risks. riskier when moving In conclusion, spending more money on rail lines than roads is a good option to provide better transport experience for people and benefit the whole society
With urbanization and increasing population, the
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system is facing problems.
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argue that
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governments
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agree
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One on the hand, the improvement of railway lines brought
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First
, the transportation of
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goods
will have
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benefits. Locomotives can carry tons of
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goods
to
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many
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different
cities and regions, while cars or trucks are not capable of doing this.
Secondly
, investing money in commuter rail
is considered
an
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important
economic decision,
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good
facilities and reasonable fares
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make
it easy for the majority of
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people
to travel,
especially
to their hometown or region.
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remote
areas.
Finally
, this means of
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contributes to limiting environmental pollution. Compared with road
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, trains cause less fossil fuel combustion and emissions than other means of transport.

Investing in a modern tram system will bring
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many
benefits to individuals.
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People
can travel faster
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because
they don't
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have to
struggle with the congestion most commuters experience. Trains can reach much higher speeds than cars, and
as a result
, it takes
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people
less time to
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get
around.
In addition
, traveling will be more comfortable
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because
guests can enjoy the scenery along the railway. Meanwhile, driving or riding a motorbike in heavy traffic can seem much more stressful.
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for
example, every time on holiday I
usually
choose to take the train to go home
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because
it
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only
takes 4 hours,
in addition
, I can
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see
the sea and feel much safer while the car is 8 hours and has
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many
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risks
.
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riskier
when moving

In conclusion
, spending more money on rail lines than roads is a
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good
option to provide better
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transport
experience for
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people
and benefit the whole
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society
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IELTS essay With urbanization and increasing population, the transport system is facing problems. Some argue that governments should spend more money building and upgrading railways instead of roads. I strongly agree with this opinion.

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