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With the widespread use of the Internet, more people choose to work or study from home. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

With the widespread use of the Internet, more people choose to work or study from home. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? bY8VQ
With the arrival of the world wide web more and more people are relying on the internet and prefer to work or study from home because of the convenience. Technology has made our lives easier, faster and more comfortable. I believe this trend has greater merits than demerits. I will support my viewpoint with relevant examples in the subsequent paragraphs. Firstly, because of the widespread use of the Internet people are able to connect with each other across the globe enabling them to work or study together. Unlike in the past you are not required to travel and waste both your time and money just to convey messages as it can be done with the help of various gadgets with an internet connection. For Instance, due to the current pandemic situation, we are required to maintain social distancing and most of the MNC's around the world have instructed their employees to work from home. If we did not have the required technology, it would have negatively affected the business, thereby shattering the economy around the world. Secondly, educational institutions nowadays promote students to use tablets or laptops for studying purposes. Due to the Covid-19 situation schools and colleges conduct classes through various softwares such as zoom, Webex etc. For example, In India the government took an initiative to provide laptops and wifi connection to the underprivileged students of the society so that there would be no hindrance for their education. However, on the other hand, despite the many advantages of digitization, it also has a few demerits. Nowadays people rely on gadgets too much and even during their leisure time they are glued to their seats and prefer to binge watch various programmes on applications such as Amazon prime, Netflix etc. This type of sedentary lifestyle can be detrimental to their health and in the long run they are prone to various ailments. In conclusion, Although there are a few demerits of using the Internet, it certainly has made our lives more convenient and faster.
With the arrival of the
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world wide web
more and more
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people
are relying on the internet and prefer to work or study from home
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the convenience. Technology has made our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
easier, faster and more comfortable. I believe this trend has greater merits than demerits. I will support my viewpoint with relevant examples in the subsequent paragraphs.

Firstly
,
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because
of the widespread
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use
of the Internet
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people
are able to connect with each other across the globe enabling them to work or study together. Unlike in the past you are not required to travel and waste both your time and money
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
to convey messages as it can
be done
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of
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various
gadgets with an internet connection.
For Instance
, due to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
pandemic situation, we
are required
to maintain social distancing and most of the
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MNC
's around the world have instructed their employees to work from home. If we did not have the required technology, it would have
negatively
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
the business, thereby shattering the economy around the world.

Secondly
, educational institutions nowadays promote students to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
tablets or laptops for studying purposes. Due to the Covid-19 situation schools and colleges conduct classes through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
Possible spelling mistake found.
softwares
such as zoom,
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Webex
etc.
For example
, In India the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
took an initiative to provide laptops and
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wifi
connection to the underprivileged students of the society
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that there would be no hindrance for their education.

However
,
on the other hand
, despite the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
advantages of digitization, it
also
has a few demerits. Nowadays
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
rely on gadgets too much and even during their leisure time they
are glued
to their seats and prefer to binge
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
Possible spelling mistake. 'programmes' is British English.
programmes
on applications such as
If the term is a proper noun, use initial capitals.
Amazon prime
, Netflix etc. This type of sedentary lifestyle can be detrimental to their health and in the long run they are prone to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
ailments.

In conclusion
, Although there are a few demerits of using the Internet, it
certainly
has made our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
more convenient and faster.
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IELTS essay With the widespread use of the Internet, more people choose to work or study from home. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
335 words
6.0
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