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In some countries boys and girls are educated separately after the age of about 10 years old.discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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It has been a debatable woe wheather single-sex education must be encouraged or not it is thought by certain individuals that, it is more profitable for overall growth of every pupil, whereas others reckon that students should be educated separately after some age. This essay will not only discuss both the aspects, but my opinion will also be highlighted while concluding the essay. To commence with, there are plethora of reasons why numerous people acknowledge that students should taught in mix gender. However, the prominent reason is that, it is not advisable for both in terms of social development. In addition, a mixed- sex education is more representative of real life. To illustrate, if the school goers are kept in the similar educational institute than, it will provide children's with better social skills for adult life. Moreover, they will work in unity and a habit of working in a team will be inculcated in them from their early age. Thus, this type of practise of co-education will not only be beneficial for the student's life, but also fruitful for the overall development of the society as well as for the country. Nevertheless, inspite of myriads of merits of mix education, there are some individuals who opposes the notion of teaching together regardless of gender. Firstly, many thinks that discipline issue might be avoided by sigle-sex education. Furthermore, it is also said by numerous particulars that pupils can express themselves openly without feeling shy or hassetation. To cite an instance, numerous educational trust provides single-sex education such as BAPS ans many more, since they believe that males should be educated separately from females, as after certain age their mind cannot concentrate on one thing due to hormonal changes and their focus from education can ne distracted. Thus, due to the above mentioned facts mix education is not promoted in many countries across the globe. In conclusion, although sigle-sex education has some probs such as distraction and lack of concentration on studies. Henceforth, I firmly assert that mixed education would be more fruitful as social development and social skills are developed between pupils and will last long throughout their life.
It has been a debatable woe
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wheather
single-sex
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education
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must
be encouraged
or not it is
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thought
by certain individuals that, it is more profitable for
overall
growth of every pupil, whereas others reckon that students should
be educated
separately
after
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some
age. This essay will not
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only
discuss both the aspects,
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but
my opinion will
also
be highlighted
while concluding the essay. To commence with, there are plethora of reasons why numerous
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people
acknowledge that students should
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taught
in mix gender.
However
, the prominent reason is that, it is not advisable for both in terms of
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social
development.
In addition
, a mixed- sex
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education
is more representative of real
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life
. To illustrate, if the school goers are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
in the similar educational institute than, it will provide children's with better
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social
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
for adult
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life
.
Moreover
, they will work in unity and a habit of working in a team will
be inculcated
in them from their early age.
Thus
, this type of
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practise
of co-education will not
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only
be beneficial for the student's
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life
,
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but
also
fruitful for the
overall
development of the society
as well
as for the country.
Nevertheless
,
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inspite
of myriads of merits of mix
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education
, there are
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some
individuals who
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opposes
the notion of teaching together regardless of gender.
Firstly
,
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many
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thinks
that discipline issue might
be avoided
by
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sigle-sex
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education
.
Furthermore
, it is
also
said by numerous particulars that pupils can express themselves
openly
without feeling shy or
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hassetation
. To cite an instance, numerous educational trust provides single-sex
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education
such as BAPS ans
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
more, since they believe that males should
be educated
separately
from females, as after certain age their mind cannot concentrate on one thing due to hormonal
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changes
and their focus from
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education
can
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ne
distracted.
Thus
, due to the above mentioned facts mix
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education
is not promoted in
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many
countries across the globe.
In conclusion
, although
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sigle-sex
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education
has
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some
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probs
such as distraction and lack of concentration on studies. Henceforth, I
firmly
assert that mixed
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education
would be more fruitful as
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social
development and
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social
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skills
are developed
between pupils and will last long throughout their
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life
.
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IELTS essay In some countries boys and girls are educated separately after the age of about 10 years old.

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