Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

With the unstoppable progress of globalization, the development of technologies and mass medias are increasing each day. Hence, to meet a need about people life, the TV set have a vital role in serving entertainment, updating news,… for human life. However, it is important to assess the utility of things that the station bring about for us. Even though, not only the televisions contribute to the active role for almost people, but also its bring about a number of adverse things because nearly all the news show are presenting more disaster and violence.

With the unstoppable progress of globalization, the development of technologies and mass medias are increasing each day. Hence, to meet a need about people life, the TV set have a vital role in serving entertainment, updating news, … for human life. However, it is important to assess the utility of things that the station bring about for us. Even though, not only the televisions contribute to the active role for almost people, but also its bring about a number of adverse things because nearly all the news show are presenting more disaster and violence. b2kKW
With the unstoppable progress of globalization, the development of technologies and mass medias are increasing each day. Hence, to meet a need about people life, the TV set have a vital role in serving entertainment, updating news, … for human life. However, it is important to assess the utility of things that the station bring about for us. Even though, not only the televisions contribute to the active role for almost people, but also its bring about a number of adverse things because nearly all the news show are presenting more disaster and violence. On the one hand, there is a great cause for televisions programs broadcast improper content and vulgar stuff. That is due to of the fact in many cases of the pugnacities are occurs frequently in today’s society, that result in announcement site that are always updated with more and more violent incidents. Even, if similar situations do not improve, the tunnels will be acquire more profits for their own. Furthermore, the channels are recognize when they show about news of violent they will receive great attention from viewers and from then on, their TRP will be increase rapidly due to the significant increase in viewership owing to the fact that sensational news appearing a lot on television. So, the news medium will display news stories with disaster or violent content as the main news to attract viewers. For instance there are some new channels just care about their profits and television rating point so they usually show the detail information, views of disaster and crimes to appealing individuals for their channels. On the other hand, when the news channels show many tidings about violent, it is harmful to people concrete is infant as well as society. Needless to say, all of programs about violent will be stimulate the toddler and adolescence to offended crimes. Because, they are impacted on from negative behaviors by the new channels. In addition, the immediately footage from the scene provide the motive that the accused has been murder or show brutal behaviors to threaten the victims, a way point out how to individuals to commit crimes. For this reason, the rate of street crime increased dramatically. By meant of illustration, In Viet Nam, according to the latest statistics of the Ministry of Public Security, the rate of juvenile crime in the whole country is 5. 2% for people under 14 years old, 24. 5% for people aged 14 to under 16 years old and 70. 3% for people between 16 and under 18 years old. In conclusions, TV is a great source which can be bring about benefit news for individuals. On the contracy, the new channels need show more a plethora of good news instead of violence and disaster news otherwise it may spark off endangered.
With the unstoppable progress of globalization, the development of technologies and mass medias are increasing each day.
Hence
, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
a need about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
life, the TV set have a vital role in serving entertainment, updating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
, … for human life.
However
, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to assess the utility of things that the station bring about for us.
Even though
, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
televisions
contribute to the active role for almost
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
its bring about a number of adverse things
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
nearly
all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
show
are presenting more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
disaster
and violence.

On the one hand, there is a great cause for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
televisions
programs broadcast improper content and vulgar stuff.
That is
due to of the fact in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
cases of the
Possible spelling mistake found.
pugnacities
are occurs
frequently
in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
’s society, that result in announcement site that are always updated with more and more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
violent
incidents. Even, if similar situations do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
, the tunnels will be
Consider using the past participle "acquired"?
acquire
more profits for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
.
Furthermore
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
channels
are
Consider using a past participle here: "recognized".
recognize
when they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
show
about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
violent
they will receive great attention from viewers and from then on, their TRP will be increase
rapidly
due to the significant increase in viewership owing to the fact that sensational
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
appearing a lot on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
television
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
medium will display
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
stories with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
disaster
or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
violent
content as the main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
to attract viewers.
For instance
there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
channels
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
care about their profits and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
television
rating point
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they
usually
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
show
the detail information, views of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
disaster
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crimes
to appealing individuals for their channels.

On the other hand
, when the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
channels
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
show
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
tidings about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
violent
, it is harmful to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
concrete is infant
as well
as society. Needless to say,
Consider using "all programs" or "all of the programs".
all of programs
about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
violent
will be
Consider using the past participle "stimulated"?
stimulate
the toddler and adolescence to offended
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crimes
.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
, they
are impacted
on from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
behaviors by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
channels
.
In addition
, the immediately footage from the scene provide the motive that the accused has been murder or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
show
brutal behaviors to threaten the victims, a way point out how to individuals to commit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crimes
.
For this reason
, the rate of street
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
increased
dramatically
. By meant of illustration, In
Possible spelling mistake found.
Viet
Nam, according to the latest statistics of the Ministry of Public Security, the rate of juvenile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
in the whole country is 5. 2% for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
under 14 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
, 24. 5% for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
aged 14 to under 16 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
and 70. 3% for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
between 16 and under 18 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
.

In conclusions, TV is a great source which can be
Consider using the past participle "brought"?
bring
about benefit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
for individuals. On the
Possible spelling mistake found.
contracy
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
channels
need
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
show
more a plethora of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
instead
of violence and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
disaster
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
otherwise
it may spark off endangered.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay With the unstoppable progress of globalization, the development of technologies and mass medias are increasing each day. Hence, to meet a need about people life, the TV set have a vital role in serving entertainment, updating news, … for human life. However, it is important to assess the utility of things that the station bring about for us. Even though, not only the televisions contribute to the active role for almost people, but also its bring about a number of adverse things because nearly all the news show are presenting more disaster and violence.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
466 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 5.5band
    Consumer behavior on trongbow
    Vietnam is reported to be one of the highest beverage-consuming markets. According to the EU-Vietnam Business Network, the consumption of beverages, including alcoholic and non-alcoholic drinks in Viet Nam witnesses a significant rise with an annual growth rate of 6%, which was estimated to increase...
  • 6.5band
    What measures could be taken to declining quality of water and air
    Air and water are indispensable for all the living creatures in the certain environment. Unfortunately, there has been a decline in the quality of them due to industrialization and construction especially in developing countries. In light of the fact that in those areas, the priority is given to mod...
  • 5.5band
    Unemployment and its affects for today
    Although unemployment has always existed, It has increased significantly since the last decades. My essay will highlight about joblessness and causes and effects of it. There are a number of factors that can boost unemployment are the overcrowding in cities and developing of technology day by day, m...
  • 5band
    Everyone seeks happiness in life and find out different ways to achieve it. As it is a subjective feeling, everyone perceives it in a different manner. Is happiness difficult to define? What do you think makes people happy?
    It is commonly accepted that happiness difficult to define. Because happiness depends on person to person. Different people find different ways to achieve their happiness. Someone thinks money is their happiness and some rich people think that staying with family is happiness. Some youngers are thin...
  • 5band
    THE DEATH PENALTY IS THE BEST WAY TO CONTROL AND REDUCE SERIOUS CRIMES.
    SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT THE DEATH PENALTY IS THE PROPER WAY TO OPERATE AND MINIMIZE BRUTAL CRIMES. WHILE I FIND THIS VIEWPOINT OF SOME PEOPLE JUSTIFIABLE TO SOME EXTENT, HOWEVER, I DISAGREE THAT CAPITAL PUNISHMENTS SHOULD BE USED. ON THE ONE HAND, I CAN UNDERSTAND WHY GOVERNMENT SHOULD APPLY CAPITAL ...
  • 5band
    Application Form for award
    We would like to go to North Korea to learn their life. North Korea is a very isolated country that is hard to enter. We will learn the life of the citizens of North Korea and their culture. Our plan is to stay with local families instead of staying at an inn. We will ask them about their daily life...