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With the rapid advancement of internet, some people believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, with the fast-paced proliferation of internet and other high-tech devices which provide people the abilities to solve their daily problems in a quick manner way, it is believed that the downsides of these would be overwhelmed by the upsides. From my perspective, I totally agree with the mentioned statement which will be discussed in this essay. On the one hand, there are several reasons to explain the benefits cutting-edge devices. One of the most significant advantage is that the advancement of technology will erase the geographical adversity. For instance, instead of travelling for a long distance to meet face-to-face, people could just stay at home and use some applications such as Facetime to communicate. Another striking advantage is that the development of technology is an important turning-point to develop other sector. For example, people had to spend several years to build a skyscraper in the past, but the appearence of high-tech tools allow people to do it within a year. On the other hand, it is believed that there are some disadvantages of the advanced devices that human have to face. One of the most salient negatives is that users’ health will decrease and they will become technologically dependent. For example, people do not want to participate in social activities, instead of going outside, they will just stay at home and enjoy the benefits of such devices bring to them and their life may exist in parallel with the help of these devices. However, it is my belief, these disadvantages seem not to be worried if people know the importance of their health and know how to control their behaviour. In conclusion, with the benefits of rapid advancement of technology bring for us, i believe that the advantages will dominate the disadvanatges.

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fast
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devices
 which provide You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 the abilities to solve their daily problems Consider replacing "in a quick manner" with the adverb for "quick"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a quick manner
 way, it is believed
 that the downsides of these would be overwhelmed
 by the upsides. From my perspective, I totally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 with the mentioned statement which will be discussed
 in this essay.

On the one hand, there are several reasons to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interpret
explain
 the benefits cutting-edge You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgearapparatusgadgetmaterialappliancemechanism
devices
. One of the most significant Please check whether a plural form of 'advantage' should be used.advantages
advantage
 is that the advancement of technology will erase the geographical adversity. For instance
, instead
 of travelling for a long distance to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
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people
 could This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 stay at home and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
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some
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Facetime
 to communicate. Another striking advantage is that the development of technology is an This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 turning-point to develop other sector. For example
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people
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but
 the Possible spelling mistake found.appearance
appearence
 of high-tech tools This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
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people
 to do it within a year.

On the other hand
, it is believed
 that there are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 disadvantages of the advanced You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgearapparatusgadgetmaterialappliancemechanism
devices
 that human This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 face. One of the most salient negatives is that users’ health will Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).decrease, and
decrease and
 they will become technologically
 dependent. For example
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 do not want to participate in social activities, instead
 of going outside, they will This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 stay at home and enjoy the benefits of such You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgearapparatusgadgetmaterialappliancemechanism
devices
 bring to them and their life may exist in parallel with the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 of these You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgearapparatusgadgetmaterialappliancemechanism
devices
. However
, it is my belief, these disadvantages seem not to be worried
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people
 know the importance of their health and know how to control their Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.behavior
behaviour
.

In conclusion
, with the benefits of rapid advancement of technology bring for us, Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 believe that the advantages will dominate the Possible spelling mistake found.disadvantages
disadvanatges
. 