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With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? NrVjq
Technology is growing rapidly in this world. Use of the Advance technology in the medical field booms the Human life. Medical care has been improvised and the average life span of Human also increased. With this advantage the Nation should take care of older age people. we can manage the Raising number of elderly people in today's generation. In this essay, Ii will drop my factors to mange them. Due to focusing and running towards success, Numerous people are not having kids. Due to this imbalance, In today's generation, the elderly people are rosing day by day. However, with the Advanced Medical care we can mange their health problems but a question raises, how they can take care of themselves? The answer is government should open old age Home centre's where the practisioners and the nurses will help them. Inside that home government can open a Medical drug shop and Hospital for emergency purposes. Not only the government, people also should take care of them, visting them twice a week, it will make them happy and we can relive our work stress. Students, Teens should helps their elder people by taking to regular checkups. Nation can introduced a new law which states that every graduate student not only from medical science every stream students should help the older people and look after them. To conclude this, This world should not worry about Health care system as it is at the best and increasing average life span, we have to check on and take care of elder people who stood like a backbone for us. Government should focus on a Home for elder people with all faclities to look them.
Technology is growing
rapidly
in this world.
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Use
of the Advance technology in the
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medical
field booms the Human life.
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Medical
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care
has
been improvised
and the average life span of Human
also
increased. With this advantage the Nation should take
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care
of older age
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people
.
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we
can manage the Raising number of elderly
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people
in
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today
's generation. In this essay, Ii will drop my factors to mange them.

Due to focusing and running towards success, Numerous
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people
are not having kids. Due to this imbalance, In
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today
's generation, the elderly
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people
are
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rosing
day by day.
However
, with the Advanced
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Medical
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care
we
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can mange
their health problems
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but
a question raises, how they can take
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care
of themselves? The answer is
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government
should open
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old
age Home
Consider using the plural form here: "centres".
centre's
where the
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practisioners
and the nurses will
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help
them. Inside that home
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government
can open a
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Medical
drug shop and Hospital for emergency purposes.

Not
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only
the
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government
,
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people
also
should take
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care
of them,
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visting
them twice a week, it will
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make
them
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happy and
we can relive our work
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stress
. Students, Teens should
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helps
their elder
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people
by taking to regular checkups. Nation can introduced a new law which states that every graduate student not
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only
from
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medical
science every stream students should
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help
the older
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people
and look after them.

To conclude
this, This world should not worry about Health
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care
system as it is at the best and increasing average life span, we
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have to
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check
on and take
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care
of elder
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people
who stood like a backbone for us.
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Government
should focus on a Home for elder
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people
with all
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faclities
to look them.
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IELTS essay With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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