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In the future, we will have more and more leisure time as machines replace many of the tasks we do at home and at work. Discuss the benefits this will bring and also the problems it will cause.

In the future, we will have more and more leisure time as machines replace many of the tasks we do at home and at work. Discuss the benefits this will bring and also the problems it will cause. 56ADP
Undoubtedly, the latest technology has given variety of user-friendly machines in last few decades and also will continue to invent new idea in the future. Using machines at home or at work are always a time-saving. The more we use machines, the more we get leisure time. But this can be always resulted in positive. Increasing numbers of machine at home or work-place may face many disadvantages as well as advantages. To begin, reduced quality time with family members can be increased in the future. Today, most family members complains about lack of time to spend with each-other, especially, a working woman. Even-though, technology has given given enormous range of households machines like, washing-machine, microwave oven, or may be a food processor. It requires a manual start and end process by human only. However, recently Japan has introduced a house-wife robot who does all home-works, from cleaning to cooking. In such instances, a working woman can spend more time with their family, specially with children who needs more attention. Moreover, it will be proven as a god to the aged people who are living alone. They will be able to live independently with the help of such robot machines. Secondly, people will try to become more social, which is again a very lifelike problem in today's society. By using more machines at work, people can use their leisure time to get socialized. They can attend more family functions and can increase the social contacts, which is necessary for personal as well as family growth. However, replacement of physical activities by machines has negative effects as well. We are already facing a major side-effect of machines, like, laziness in majority of people. People are become so dependent on machines that they feel handicap without machines. As a result, they faces health problems like, obesity, diabetes, cardiac attacks, and many more. The society is already facing the consequences of using more machines at work and home. In future it is going to increase the problem more rather to solve. To summaries, more quality time and increases in social appearance will outweigh the other problems which may raise due to extensive use of machines in future.
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machines
in last few decades and
also
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idea
in the
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future
. Using
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machines
at home or at work are always
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a time-saving
. The more we
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, the more we
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leisure
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time
.
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positive
. Increasing numbers of
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machine
at home or work-place may face
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disadvantages
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,
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quality
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members can
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, most
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members complains about lack of
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time
to spend with each-other,
especially
, a working woman. Even-though, technology has
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given
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given
enormous range of households
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machines
like, washing-machine, microwave oven, or may be a food processor. It requires a manual
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start
and
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process by human
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However
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house
-wife robot who does all home-works, from cleaning to cooking. In such instances, a working woman can spend more
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time
with their
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family
,
specially
with children who
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needs
more attention.
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people
who are living alone. They will be able to
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,
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will try to become more social, which is again a
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lifelike
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can
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their leisure
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to
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socialized. They can attend more
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family
functions and can increase the social contacts, which is necessary for personal
as well
as
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growth.
However
, replacement of physical activities by
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machines
has
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effects
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.

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, like, laziness in
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majority of
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dependent on
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, they
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health
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problems
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at work and home. In
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more
rather
to solve.

To summaries, more quality
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time
and increases in social appearance will outweigh the other
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problems
which may raise due to extensive
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use
of
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IELTS essay In the future, we will have more and more leisure time as machines replace many of the tasks we do at home and at work. Discuss the benefits this will bring and also the problems it will cause.

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