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Do you agree or disagree with the following topic? The Internet has destroyed communication between friends and family

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The internet is growing better and better, because of the internet we can communicate with the friends far away from us. But many people think phones or computer is their whole life. It’s not a good happening. Internet can only promote friends far from us, but for families or the friends just by our side, we ignore them because we’re using phones. And we didn’t care about people who just next to us. So I think internet is destroyed communicate with friends and families. For the other reasons, some mobile games also need to connect the internet. So when we play this kind of online games, we always forget the people who just next to us. In this situation we will lazy on talking with people face by face. The internet are destroyed our lives. We can only limit ourselves for using internet. In that way lives will be more colorful.
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phones or computer is their whole life. It’s not a
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happening.

Internet can
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promote
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far from us,
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for families or the
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friends
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by our side, we
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them
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we’re using phones. And we didn’t care about
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who
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next
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internet is
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communicate with
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friends
and families.

For the other reasons,
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mobile games
also
need to connect the internet.
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So
when we play this kind of online games, we always forget the
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people
who
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just
next
to us. In this situation we will lazy on talking with
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people
face by face.

The internet are
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destroyed
our
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limit ourselves for using internet. In that way
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lives
will be more colorful.

IELTS essay with the following topic? The Internet has destroyed communication between friends and family

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
151 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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