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With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends, which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends, which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem? d0M6
It is believed by one part of society that decrease of amount of languages will make our life easier. Other people are convinced that diversity of languages does not make our nowadays life harder. I disagree with the first opinion and think that today’s variety of world languages has a lot of benefits for the whole society and, respectively, for the individuals. People who are convinced that disappearing languages make life everyday life easier usually say that these extinct tongues are spoken by no more than 10 000 people and are minority languages. Consequently, they consider these languages as unimportant. Also, such processes like diplomatic cooperation of countries became easier because of using international languages (English, French, German). On the other side, arguments which proclaim that diversity of tongues has lots of benefits seem more likely to be convincing. Every language is a culture of a nation and helps us to understand the identity of the nation. Even if these languages are spoken by less people than, for instance, English, they have huge role in the history of humanity. Cultural heritage such as myths, cave drawings, codes of laws, ancient literature are left by nations which language is disappearing today, so if we forget them, we will lose the history of culture which will make our life more difficult, because we will not know the history of ancestors. To sum up, it is not necessary that only most spread languages should exist. Diversity of languages does not make the life harder or more complicated. Conversely, the extinction of these languages will make existence more difficult.
It
is believed
by one part of society that decrease of amount of
languages
will
make
our
life
easier. Other
people
are convinced
that diversity of
languages
does not
make
our nowadays
life
harder. I disagree with the
first
opinion and
think
that
today
’s variety of world
languages
has
a lot of
benefits for the whole society and,
respectively
, for the individuals.

People
who
are convinced
that disappearing
languages
make
life
everyday
life
easier
usually
say that these extinct tongues
are spoken
by no more than 10 000
people
and are minority
languages
.
Consequently
, they consider these
languages
as unimportant.
Also
, such processes like diplomatic cooperation of countries became easier
because
of using international
languages
(English, French, German).

On the other side, arguments which proclaim that diversity of tongues has lots of benefits seem more likely to be convincing. Every
language
is a culture of a nation and
helps
us to understand the identity of the nation. Even if these
languages
are spoken
by
less
people
than,
for instance
, English, they have huge role in the history of humanity. Cultural heritage such as myths, cave drawings, codes of laws, ancient literature are
left
by nations which
language
is disappearing
today
,
so
if we forget them, we will lose the history of culture which will
make
our
life
more difficult,
because
we will not know the history of ancestors.

To sum up, it is not necessary that
only
most spread
languages
should exist. Diversity of
languages
does not
make
the
life
harder or more complicated.
Conversely
, the extinction of these
languages
will
make
existence more difficult.
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IELTS essay With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends, which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.0
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