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With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitats an some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitats an some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem? x1qb
Biodiversity is the natures way to balance ecosystem, every living animal is co-dependent to the relative species around them. However, humans for decades have disrespected the thought of biodiversity to serve their selfish agenda. The below essay will elaborate why saving animals should the primary concern. TO begin with, why is biodiversity important? as we humans have evolved to be self dependent, we have stopped acknowledging the importance of co-dependency. For instance, pouching animals for their fur and other parts has reduced the number of tigers in Indian rain-forest, thereby, creating a imbalance in the ecosystem. The number of deer have increased drastically, consequently, decreasing the biodiversity of herbs and smaller plants that deer's usually feed on. Furthermore, smaller plans are important to refurbishing the minerals within the soil, subsequently, the forest soil is loosing its potency to house the vast biodiversity rain-forest has to offer. Additionally, de-forestation is escalating the problem in hand. With forest being cut down to house the increasing number of population, animals are left with more than half of their land being stripped off. For instance, Kollegal forest has lost 50% of its land to deforestation, furthermore, animals are now invading into human space. On the other hand, humans now have realized the importance of biodiversity, government has takes important steps to mitigate the damage done by humans. For example, the vast census done by the government of India to identify the exact number tigers living in India, they tagged every single tiger and started to track them to prevent pouching, moreover, strict laws are passed against pouching, this forces people to abide bu the law. These steps have yielded good results, now the number of tigers are increasing day by day. To conclude, although biodiversity is on a declining scale, mother nature has the ability to heal itself in an astonishing speed, if given enough time and care.
Biodiversity is the natures way to balance ecosystem, every living
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animal
is co-dependent to the relative species around them.
However
,
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humans
for decades have disrespected the
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thought
of biodiversity to serve their selfish agenda. The below essay will elaborate why saving
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animals
should the primary concern.

TO
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begin
with, why is biodiversity
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important
?
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as
we
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humans
have evolved to be self dependent, we have
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stopped
acknowledging the importance of co-dependency.
For instance
, pouching
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animals
for their fur and other parts has
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reduced
the
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number
of
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tigers
in Indian rain-forest, thereby, creating
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a
imbalance in the ecosystem. The
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number
of deer
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have
increased
drastically
,
consequently
, decreasing the biodiversity of herbs and smaller plants that deer's
usually
feed on.
Furthermore
, smaller plans are
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important
to refurbishing the minerals within the soil,
subsequently
, the forest soil is loosing its potency to
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house
the vast biodiversity rain-forest
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has to
offer.
Additionally
,
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de-forestation
is escalating the problem in hand. With forest being
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cut
down to
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house
the increasing
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number
of population,
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animals
are
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left
with more than half of their land
being stripped
off.
For instance
,
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Kollegal
forest has lost 50% of its land to deforestation,
furthermore
,
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animals
are
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now
invading into
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human
space.

On the other hand
,
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humans
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now
have realized the importance of biodiversity,
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government
has takes
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important
steps to mitigate the damage done by
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humans
.
For example
, the vast census done by the
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government
of India to identify the exact
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number
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tigers
living in India, they tagged every single
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tiger
and
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started
to
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track
them to
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prevent
pouching,
moreover
, strict laws
are passed
against pouching, this forces
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people
to abide
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bu
the law. These steps have yielded
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good
results,
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now
the
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number
of
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tigers
are increasing day by day.

To conclude
, although biodiversity is on a declining scale, mother nature has the ability to heal itself in an astonishing speed, if
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given
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enough
time and care.

IELTS essay With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitats an some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

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