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With a growing world population, one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the advancement in technology, the mortality percentage has dropped, resulting in the increase of the world population, which raises the issue of providing food for everyone. It is thought by some that this problem can be solved by genetically modifying the food because of quick growth. However, I strongly disagree due to health and economic concerns. Although GM foods have their advantages and mainly that it can be available throughout the year because of speedy growth as compared to traditional farming. For instance, the fruits that are only available in the summers or winters now one can easily buy in any season. Such as, one can easily purchase oranges throughout the year. Nevertheless, the demerits of GM foods outweigh its benefits. Basically, the DNA structure of these foods is modified that has a harmful effect on the human race. According to researchers, it has not only increases the allergies among people, but also they are resistant to antibiotics. Therefore, these foods are not good for health. Additionally, GM foods are a threat to the economy and the unemployment rate of a country. Most of the companies have invested heavily in the production of these foods and patent the seeds. These seeds are expensive and farmers cannot afford them, as a result, big corporations controlling the market price of vegetables and fruits. This has led farmers to abandon the farming resulting in an increase in unemployment. For example, in India, about 40% of the population is associated with farming and according to recent surveys, many have either left this occupation or committed suicide because of GM foods. Therefore, these foods are negatively affecting the economy and the employment rate of a country. In conclusion, although one can easily purchase GM food the whole year, but it will negatively affect the health, but also the economy and employment percentage of a country. Therefore, I strongly disagree with the notion that GM foods are the only solution for providing food to a large population.
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for everyone. It is
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by
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some
that this problem can
be solved
by
genetically
modifying the
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food
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because
of quick growth.
However
, I
strongly
disagree due to health and economic concerns.

Although GM
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foods
have their advantages and
mainly
that it can be available throughout the year
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because
of speedy growth as compared to traditional farming.
For instance
, the fruits that are
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only
available in the summers or winters
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now
one can
easily
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buy
in any season. Such as, one can
easily
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purchase
oranges throughout the year.

Nevertheless
, the demerits of GM
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foods
outweigh its benefits.
Basically
, the DNA structure of these
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foods
is modified
that has a harmful effect on the human race. According to researchers, it has not
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only
increases the allergies among
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people
,
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but
also
they are resistant to antibiotics.
Therefore
, these
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foods
are not
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good
for health.

Additionally
, GM
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foods
are a threat to the economy and the unemployment rate of a country. Most of the
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companies
have invested
heavily
in the production of these
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foods
and patent the seeds. These seeds are expensive and farmers cannot afford them,
as a result
,
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big
corporations controlling the market price of vegetables and fruits. This has led farmers to abandon the farming resulting in an increase in unemployment.
For example
, in India, about 40% of the population
is associated
with farming and according to recent surveys,
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many
have either
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left
this occupation or committed suicide
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because
of GM
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foods
.
Therefore
, these
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foods
are
negatively
affecting the economy and the employment rate of a country.

In conclusion
, although one can
easily
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purchase
GM
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food
the whole year,
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but
it will
negatively
affect the health,
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but
also
the economy and employment percentage of a country.
Therefore
, I
strongly
disagree with the notion that GM
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foods
are the
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only
solution for providing
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food
to a large population.

IELTS essay With a growing world population, one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem.

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