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With a fast paced of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

With a fast paced of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages. J2wD
In this contemporary era, due to globalization, the momentum of life has dramatically increased and a large group of citizens are preferring (PREFER ) to eat junk food for their vitals vital meals of the day. This essay will discuss the merits and demeritS attributed to this habit with relevant examples and logical conclusion. In my opinion, the drawbacks of this lifestyle outrank the benefits. GOOD PARAPHRASING AND OUTLINE STATEMENT. QUESTION IS UNDERSTOOD WELL In the beginning, (TO BEGIN WITH )fast food recipes are quick and easy to prepare. Most of the citizens are working professionals and their daily routine is supremely busy(HECTIC). Hhowever, in order to save their precious time, they tend to eat junk food. For example, a close friend of mine eats Maggi on A regular basis because its it is extremely easy to cook and saves his time. Furthermore, junk food is usually tasty. It has all the ingredients, spices that gives give people the a sense of fulfilment and satisfaction. For instance, Ione statistics found STATE that 98% of the population in the UK eat Pizza on weekends as it tastes incredibly. (INCREDIBLE)(DELICIOUS) On the other hand, I am a strong advocate of the disadvantages associated to this lifestyle. Adapting to this habit, people fall prey to many medical issues. These are diabetes, blood pressure, cardiovascular attacks, and many more. For this reason, obesity has become one of the most growing concerns. For example, sugar was detected in the blood of my friend due to (BEING) overweight. In addition to that, junk food reduces the life expectancy of people. As consumption of junk food triggers the level of cholesterol and ill effects associated to it, in the body, thus leading to pre-matured deaths among people. For example, Sean a resident of the UK, died at A very young age because he used to consume food rich in oil and calories that sharply increased the cholesterol levels in his body and this news gained popularity on social media. In conclusion, although shifting(OPTING FOR) to this strategy has valid benefits but demerits overshadow the advantages. (MERITS ) MUST BE CAREFUL WHILE PUNCTUATION. SHOULD BE CAREFUL IN CORRECT USAGE OF WORDS WHILE FRAMING SENTENCES. MAY AFFECT SCORING IN GRAMMAR AND LEXICAL RESOURCE. GOOD DRAFTING IN THE SECOND PARAGRAPH. GOOD USAGE OF CONNECTORS LIKE HOWEVER AND FURTHERMORE.
In this contemporary era, due to globalization, the momentum of life has
dramatically
increased and a large group of citizens
The verb 'preferring' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
are preferring
(PREFER
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)
to
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eat
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junk
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food
for their vitals vital meals of the day. This essay will discuss the merits and
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demeritS
attributed to this habit with relevant
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examples
and logical conclusion. In my opinion, the drawbacks of this lifestyle outrank the benefits.

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GOOD
PARAPHRASING AND OUTLINE STATEMENT. QUESTION
IS UNDERSTOOD
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WELL


In the beginning, (TO
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BEGIN
WITH
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)
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fast
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food
recipes are quick and easy to prepare. Most of the citizens are working professionals and their daily routine is
supremely
busy(HECTIC).
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Hhowever
, in order to save their precious time, they tend to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eat
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
junk
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
. For
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example
, a close friend of mine
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eats
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Maggi
on A regular basis
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because
its it is
extremely
easy to cook and saves his time.
Furthermore
,
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junk
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food
is
usually
tasty. It has all the ingredients, spices that gives give
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people
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the a
sense of
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fulfilment
and satisfaction.
For instance
,
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Ione
statistics found STATE that 98% of the population in the UK
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eat
Pizza on weekends as it tastes
incredibly
. (INCREDIBLE)(DELICIOUS)

On the other hand
, I am a strong advocate of the disadvantages associated to this lifestyle. Adapting to this habit,
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people
fall prey to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
medical issues. These are diabetes, blood pressure, cardiovascular attacks, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
more.
For this reason
, obesity has become one of the most growing concerns. For
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example
, sugar
was detected
in the blood of my friend due to (BEING) overweight.
In addition
to that,
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junk
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
the life expectancy of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. As consumption of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
junk
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
triggers the level of cholesterol and ill effects associated to it, in the body,
thus
leading to
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pre-matured
deaths among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. For
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example
, Sean a resident of the UK,
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died
at A
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very
young age
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because
he
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used
to consume
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food
rich in oil and calories that
sharply
increased the cholesterol levels in his body and this news gained popularity on social media.

In conclusion
, although shifting(OPTING FOR) to this strategy has valid benefits
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but
demerits overshadow the advantages. (MERITS
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)


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MUST
BE CAREFUL WHILE PUNCTUATION. SHOULD BE CAREFUL IN CORRECT USAGE OF WORDS WHILE FRAMING SENTENCES. MAY AFFECT SCORING IN GRAMMAR AND LEXICAL RESOURCE.
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GOOD
DRAFTING IN THE SECOND PARAGRAPH.
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GOOD
USAGE OF CONNECTORS LIKE
HOWEVER
AND
FURTHERMORE
.
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IELTS essay With a fast paced of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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