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Why there is a new year and why do we celebrate it

Why there is a new year and why do we celebrate it BJLD6
Some people ask why there is a new year and why do we celebrate it. Yes it is a good thought and in my thinking way there is a new year to forget all the unnecessary things and stay free of them, otherwise we will have questions in the whole life. But I know there are questions in the whole life but we should stay happy even one day. They celebrate it because of their happiness. They make sweet meats and do all the things they can do to be happy. I too love the new year.
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and in my thinking way there is a new year to forget all the unnecessary things and stay free of them,
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we should stay happy even one day. They celebrate it
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sweet meats and do all the things they can do to be happy.
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IELTS essay Why there is a new year and why do we celebrate it

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
97 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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