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Childhood obesity, a typical sign of deteriorating public health has recently became a major concern. Regarding to this, some have a belief that governments should take specific actions in order to improve its. However, I advocate the view that governments should not be the only one that takes responsibility for combat the childhood obesity crisis

Childhood obesity, a typical sign of deteriorating public health has recently became a major concern. Regarding to this, some have a belief that governments should take specific actions in order to improve its. However, I advocate the view that governments should not be the only one that takes responsibility for combat the childhood obesity crisis pRe3L
Childhood obesity, a typical sign of deteriorating public health has recently became a major concern. Regarding to this, some have a belief that governments should take specific actions in order to improve its. However, I advocate the view that governments should not be the only one that takes responsibility for combat the childhood obesity crisis
Childhood obesity, a typical
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sign
of deteriorating public health has recently
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became
a major concern.
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Regarding to
this,
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some
have a belief that
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governments
should take specific actions in order to
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improve
its.
However
, I advocate the view that
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governments
should not be the
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only
one that takes responsibility for combat the childhood obesity crisis
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IELTS essay Childhood obesity, a typical sign of deteriorating public health has recently became a major concern. Regarding to this, some have a belief that governments should take specific actions in order to improve its. However, I advocate the view that governments should not be the only one that takes responsibility for combat the childhood obesity crisis

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  American English
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54 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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