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Why is volunteering important.

Why is volunteering important. KYw91
Nowadays we cannot ignore that in our fast-changing life most of young people are becoming volunteers. This process increase gradually day by day. Thus the majority of youth are interested in this direct. However, it has so many adventage and disadventage sides. Therefore I am going to do count them by essay. To begin with, volunteer being damage our time management. The reason is volunteers are taken to different holidays, forums, seminars, conferences by their supervisors. They should decorate, organise, check, look after to all items. Then when they go to trip they fall behind with studies and so suffer for catch up with others. The most important thing volunteers not be with their dear friends long time asa well as do not spend own much more times with them. Nevertheless, volunteer become so useful. Especially, for who love adventure. In addition, volunteers can new things and notions in their own life. They add so many new friends by this work. Volunteers participate various actions. The best side they help people and do not make money for these labours. To be honest, I am going to be volunteer currently. The reason is, I consider so this job very glorious. Probably, this cause several foreign universities give them so much opportunities for study. My own view on the matter is we should as them. If we can avoid rule and time management. Also studying very significant for our future too. Although there is an argument among the people about the given situation, I follow the second group because of the provided reasons that I gave in my essay above.
Nowadays we cannot
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people
are becoming
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volunteers
. This process increase
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with,
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being damage our
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management. The reason is
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volunteers
are taken
to
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holidays, forums, seminars, conferences by their supervisors. They should decorate,
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,
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, look after to all items. Then when they go to trip they fall behind with studies and
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so
suffer for catch up with others. The most
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not be with their dear friends long
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well as do not spend
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much more
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add
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participate various actions. The best side they
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people
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this job
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glorious.
Probably
, this cause several foreign universities give them
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view on the matter is we should as them. If we can avoid
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significant for our future too. Although there is an argument among the
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IELTS essay Why is volunteering important.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
268 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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