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People ore surrounded by odvertising, which hos on increosing effect on our lives. Do you think fhe posifive effecls of this oulweigh the negolive effecfs?

People ore surrounded by odvertising, which hos on increosing effect on our lives. Do you think fhe posifive effecls of this oulweigh the negolive effecfs? jQRnX
Whether it is on TV, radio or hoardings at the side of the road, advertisements have become a part of our lives. Advertising is a powerful and persuasive medium. I believe that the beneficial effects of ads overpower the detrimental ones. On the positive side, advertisements provide us with information on new products. lf it were not for electronic and print advertising, many products would not be bought. ln this way, advertising provides an important service to manufacturers and some consumers. Additionally, it fuels the advertising industry, creating jobs for thousands of people. ln this respect it has become the backbone of many economies of the world. Furthermore, advertisements touch social issues. For example, when Amitabh Bachhan tells people to bring their children for pulse polio immunization, people listen. Then, there are ads against female foeticide which are very informative. Advertisements also teach a lot about the country from where the ads come. This is because through satellite ry we can see ads from all over the world. For instance, when we see a Japanese advert of a lady in a kimono, we come to know about the traditional clothes ofJapan. However, adverts also have a downside. Because of advertisements, sometimes we buy what tempts us without the insight of what we need actually. lmpressive images, videos, or captions are bound to leave an imprint on us. Secondly, ads are very disturbing at times. Television commercials are a great example of this. Just as we are enjoying a TV program, a commercial break occurs, forcing us to listen. Then, ads show dangerous stunts, which may be copied by children and they may get hurt. Finally, some ads target vulnerable children and so children pester their parents to buy things which can upset the family budget. To conclude, adverts have their advantages and disadvantages. lndubitably, the merits outstrip the demerits. The onus lies on us to look into our real needs and not be swayed by adverts.
Whether it is on TV, radio or hoardings at the side of the road,
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advertisements
have become a part of our

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lives
. Advertising is a powerful and persuasive medium. I believe that the beneficial effects of ads

overpower the detrimental ones.

On the
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positive
side,
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advertisements
provide us with information on new products.
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it were not for

electronic and print advertising,
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many
products would not be
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bought
.
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ln
this way, advertising provides an

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important
service to manufacturers and
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some
consumers.
Additionally
, it fuels the advertising industry,

creating jobs for thousands of
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people
.
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ln
this respect it has become the backbone of
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many
economies of

the world.

Furthermore
,
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advertisements
touch social issues.
For example
, when
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Amitabh
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Bachhan
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tells
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people
to

bring their
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children
for pulse polio immunization,
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people
listen. Then, there are ads against female

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foeticide
which are
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very
informative.
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Advertisements
also
teach a lot about the country from where the

ads
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come
. This is
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because
through satellite
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ry
we can
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see
ads from all over the world.
For instance
, when

we
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see
a Japanese advert of a lady in a kimono, we
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come
to know about the traditional clothes
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ofJapan
.

However
, adverts
also
have a downside.
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of
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advertisements
,
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sometimes
we
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buy
what tempts us

without the insight of what we need actually.
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lmpressive
images, videos, or captions
are bound
to
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leave
an

imprint on us.
Secondly
, ads are
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very
disturbing at times. Television commercials are a great example of

this.
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Just
as we are enjoying a TV program, a commercial break occurs, forcing us to listen. Then, ads
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show


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dangerous
stunts, which may
be copied
by
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children and
they may
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get
hurt.
Finally
,
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some
ads target

vulnerable
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children
and
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so
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children
pester their parents to
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buy
things which can upset the family budget.

To conclude
, adverts have their advantages and disadvantages.
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lndubitably
, the merits outstrip the

demerits. The onus lies on us to look into our real needs and not
be swayed
by adverts.
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IELTS essay People ore surrounded by odvertising, which hos on increosing effect on our lives. Do you think fhe posifive effecls of this oulweigh the negolive effecfs?

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