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Employers shoul give staff at least four week holidays a year to make employees better at their jobs.To what extent do tou agree or disagree

Employers shoul give staff at least four week holidays a year to make employees better at their jobs. To what extent do tou agree or disagree bOYNB
Although, many people believe that company should give workers at least one month holidays a per year to make productive work. I differ to a large extent for some reasons. My position is argued with further explanation. Out of all the reasons, the foremost one is there are many reasons such an enterprise would benefit the employees. Firstly, it has been seent that due to long working hours and lack of holidays worker face a lot of stress and pressure. Also, due to this impact majority of laborers would go on suicides in recent days. However, the monthly holiday also benefited for employees to spend quality time with their loved ones and go on vacation and pursue their hobbies. Many companies are facing conflict war because the workforce is not able to concentrate better on work and they are unable to balance their personal and professional life. Additionally, companies and firms would also be benefitted from such a change. To begin with, industries that offer holidays would be more attractive to job seekers. In other words, such action would help the firm recruit better talent. Another advantage would be increased work efficiency and productivity. Regular yearly breaks would reduce the stress and thus, help employees to concentrate better at their work. Finally, I believe that if labor feels cared about and important, it would also improve customer satisfaction as customer satisfaction depends largely upon worker moods and their working condition. Thus, to conclude the discussion, it can be said that I m strongly in favor of the idea of employers giving four weeks of holidays to their staff members since it would benefit both as well.
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many
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believe that
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company
should give workers at least one month
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holidays
a per year to
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make
productive
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work
. I differ to a large extent for
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with
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explanation.

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reasons such an enterprise would benefit the employees.
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, it has been
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seent
that due to long working hours and lack of
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holidays
worker face
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a lot of
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stress
and pressure.
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, due to this impact majority of laborers would go on suicides in recent days.
However
, the monthly
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holiday
also
benefited for employees to spend quality time with their
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loved
ones and go on vacation and pursue their hobbies.
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companies
are facing conflict war
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the workforce is not able to concentrate better on
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work and
they are unable to balance their personal and professional life.

Additionally
,
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companies
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benefitted
from such a
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change
. To
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begin
with, industries that offer
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holidays
would be more attractive to job seekers.
In other words
, such action would
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help
the firm recruit better talent. Another advantage would
be increased
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work
efficiency and productivity. Regular yearly breaks would
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reduce
the
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stress
and
thus
,
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help
employees to concentrate better at their
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work
.
Finally
, I believe that if labor feels cared about and
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important
, it would
also
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improve
customer satisfaction as customer satisfaction depends
largely
upon worker moods and their working condition.

Thus
,
to conclude
the discussion, it can
be said
that I m
strongly
in favor of the
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idea
of employers giving four weeks of
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holidays
to their staff members since it would benefit both
as well
.
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IELTS essay Employers shoul give staff at least four week holidays a year to make employees better at their jobs. To what extent do tou agree or disagree

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