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Why is it important to save for retirement?

Why is it important to save for retirement? NlRmg
People are increasingly considering early retirement. They have an early urge to spend time with their family and themselves, enjoying life, rather than waiting until they reach retirement age. To ensure that you can live the life you want even if you don't work. First and foremost, you must have a sound financial basis in order to live comfortably after retirement. To enjoy the remainder of your life after retirement, you must pay off all of your debts. Your retirement funds will be put under a lot of strain due to debt and costs. . At the same time, you'll need to figure out how much money you'll make once you retire. It's extremely critical to safeguard your assets once you've decided to retire. Make changes to your portfolio in accordance with your investing plan. Many young people nowadays are under a great deal of stress as a result of their work. However, their objective is to work as hard as they can while they are young in order to accumulate a large sum of money so that they may live comfortably and pleasantly later in life when they retire. As a result, many people make retirement savings a high priority. When you cease or reduce the number of hours you work, , you'll have enough money to enjoy a reasonable quality of life when you retire.
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IELTS essay Why is it important to save for retirement?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
227 words
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