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Why do people go to university/college?

Why do people go to university/college? XGo2O

Undoubtedly, there is now a general consensus among human beings that everyone must be graduated, but why people held this view? Of those sundries of reasons to be mentioned, finding a prestigious job and having a higher social rank are the points that should be dwelled upon here. First of all, on no account would anyone neglect the significance of money, which is paid as a salary thanks to the job we do, in our lives. Being educated paves the way to find a favorable occupation. For example, my brother was a taxi driver, he worked almost twelve hours a day. Despite he worked diligently he gained only a little amount of money which he could afford just his apartment’s loan. He always was nagging about this situation and he was not comfortable at all. In the meantime, he continued his education career at the university. He was a student in the civil engineering field, and finally, he graduated. He is an engineer now and he does not drive a taxi anymore, contradictory, he has a private driver and he is the owner of a few cars and apartments. Consequently, finding a beneficial work is strongly related to being prosperous in studying at the university. Secondly, never can anyone ever cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of the being an acceptable person in a society. Well, the university help persons to achieve this goal. For instance, my friend ended his lessons after he finished the high school. He was in love with a girl and they imagined to marry each other. Anyway, the parents of the girl not only resisted with this marriage but also they denounced my friend in the light of his low-level education. This incident made Tom upset and persuaded him to resume his study. He started to study in order to win university and he prospered. He is a famous doctor now and most of the girls dream to be his spouse. As a result, a university is a place which helps individuals to be a selected man in the future. To put in the nutshell, I have personally subscribed to the view that people should continue their educational career in the colleges and universities. Educated people are in a higher rank in the society and they find more beneficial jobs. It is high time government subsidized anyone who dreams to be involved in the university courses.

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, there is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 a Consider using "consensus".consensus
general consensus
 among human beings that everyone This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
be graduated
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 why This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 held this view? Of those sundries of reasons to be mentioned
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dwelled
 upon here.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, on no account would anyone neglect the significance of money, which is paid
 as a salary thanks to the job we do, in our This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
. Being educated
 paves the way to find a favorable occupation. For example
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only
 a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
little
 amount of money which he could afford This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 his apartment’s loan. He The adverb 'always' usually goes after the verb 'was'.was always
always was
 nagging about this Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).situation, and
situation and
 he was not comfortable at all. In the meantime, he continued his education career at the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withacademyeducational institution
university
. He was a student in the civil engineering field, and finally
, he graduated. He is an engineer Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).now, and
now and
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driver and
 he is the owner of a few cars and apartments. Consequently
, finding a beneficial work is strongly
 related to being prosperous in studying at the university.

Secondly
, never can anyone ever cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of Please check whether a word is missing between 'the' and 'being' or whether 'the' is the correct determiner.
the
 being an acceptable person in a society. Well, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withacademyeducational institution
university
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 persons to achieve this goal. For instance
, my friend ended his lessons after he finished the high school. He was in This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admireadore
love
 with a Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).girl, and
girl and
 they The verb 'imagined' is used with the gerund form: "imagined marrying".imagined marrying
imagined to marry
 each other. Anyway, the parents of the girl not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 resisted with this marriage This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
 they denounced my friend in the light of his low-level education. This incident made Tom upset and persuaded him to resume his study. He This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 to study in order to win Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).university, and
university and
 he prospered. He is a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:well-known
famous
 doctor This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 and most of the girls dream to be his spouse. As a result
, a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withacademyeducational institution
university
 is a place which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
 individuals to be a selected This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualresidentcitizen
man
 in the future.

To put in the nutshell, I have personally
 subscribed to the view that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 should continue their educational career in the colleges and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withacademyeducational institution
universities
. Educated This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 are in a higher rank in the Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).society, and
society and
 they find more beneficial jobs. It is high time This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 subsidized anyone who dreams to be involved
 in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withacademyeducational institution
university
 courses. 