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Why are you applying for Financial Aid?

Why are you applying for Financial Aid? BJ3am
I am a student from Iran. I have studied industrial engineering and i want to continue my education. I want to learn more related subjects to my field. I think it will be beneficial for my studies. But I’ve no job of my own to carry the expenses to pay for the certificate of this course. It is so difficult for me to gather such amount of money for the certificate. Financial Aid will help me take this course without any adverse impact on my monthly essential needs. So I’m in need of this financial aid. I want to take this course as I want to learn. This course will boost my job prospects after graduation. It will help perform better in understanding and learning this field and give me an edge over my competitors. A verified certificate will attach credibility to the certificate I receive from this course.
I am a student from Iran. I have studied industrial engineering and
i
want
to continue my education.
I
want
to learn more related subjects to my field.
I
think
it will be beneficial for my studies.
But
I’ve no job of my
own
to carry the expenses to pay for the
certificate
of this
course
. It is
so
difficult for me to gather such amount of money for the
certificate
. Financial Aid will
help
me take this
course
without any adverse impact on my monthly essential needs.
So
I’m in need of this financial aid. I
want
to take this
course
as I
want
to learn. This
course
will boost my job prospects after graduation. It will
help
perform better in understanding and learning this field and give me an edge over my competitors. A verified
certificate
will attach credibility to the
certificate
I receive from this
course
.
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IELTS essay Why are you applying for Financial Aid?

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149 words
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