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While some people believe that government surveillance (such as Closed Circuit Television (CCTV), and the use of speed cameras) is essential for individuals to feel safe within a society, others feel it limits their freedom. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words

While some people believe that government surveillance (such as Closed Circuit Television (CCTV), and the use of speed cameras) is essential for individuals to feel safe within a society, others feel it limits their freedom. 15o2X
It is considered by some that security cameras are extremely necessary for people's well-being while some argue that it restricts their freedom. In my opinion, surveillance cameras provide a sense of protection for some individuals. Firstly, the use of these government monitoring cameras have evidently contributed to solving complex crimes. There have been plenty of proofs that they have helped law enforcement reduce crime rates. This has resulted in municipalities installing more security systems to record the activities of their residents in their local areas. Secondly, the implementation of speed cameras has helped to improve road safety. For example, in the small community I live in, speed cameras have been enforced and this alters the behaviour of some drivers coming from the city who are used to driving fast and aggressive. They immediately comply with the road regulations as they know that they can easily be traced once they violate it. The deployment of these technologies clearly helps promote responsible driving and helps save lives in the streets. On the other hand, I also support the opinion that these surveillance systems may negatively impact one's freedom and confidence. There have been some cases where people don't feel comfortable knowing that there are other people constantly recording their every movement and that it invades their privacy. I have seen some documentaries showing some people who are being supervised without their permission and resulted in a more serious and costly affair. Furthermore, there have been instances that these systems have been easily abused whereas employees use their access to these records to blackmail people. Therefore, some argue that it has just created more issues for people's personal rights. To sum up, placing cameras in strategic areas can help ensure public care, protect property and reduce crimes however unauthorized surveillance can also violate someone's personal space and rights. Therefore, how to balance the general public's safety and privacy should be considered further by the government.
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that security
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cameras
are
extremely
necessary for
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people
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some
argue that it restricts their freedom.

In my opinion, surveillance
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cameras
provide a sense of protection for
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some
individuals.
Firstly
, the
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use
of these
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government
monitoring
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cameras
have
evidently
contributed to solving complex crimes. There have been
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plenty
of proofs that they have
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helped
law enforcement
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reduce
crime rates. This has resulted in municipalities installing more security systems to record the activities of their residents in their local areas.
Secondly
, the implementation of speed
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cameras
has
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helped
to
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improve
road safety.
For example
, in the
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small
community I
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live
in, speed
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cameras
have
been enforced
and this alters the
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behaviour
of
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some
drivers coming from the city who are
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used
to driving
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fast
and aggressive. They immediately comply with the road regulations as they know that they can
easily
be traced
once they violate it. The deployment of these technologies
clearly
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helps
promote responsible driving and
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helps
save
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lives
in the streets.

On the other hand
, I
also
support the opinion that these surveillance systems may
negatively
impact one's freedom and confidence. There have been
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some
cases where
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people
don't feel comfortable knowing that there are other
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people
constantly
recording their every movement and that it invades their privacy. I have
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seen
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some
documentaries showing
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some
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people
who are
being supervised
without their permission and resulted in a more serious and costly affair.
Furthermore
, there have been instances that these systems have been
easily
abused whereas employees
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their access to these records to blackmail
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people
.
Therefore
,
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some
argue that it has
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just
created more issues for
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people
's personal rights.

To sum up, placing
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cameras
in strategic areas can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
ensure public care, protect property and
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reduce
crimes
however
unauthorized surveillance can
also
violate someone's personal space and rights.
Therefore
, how to balance the
Consider using "public".
general public
's safety and privacy should
be considered
further
by the
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government
.
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IELTS essay While some people believe that government surveillance (such as Closed Circuit Television (CCTV), and the use of speed cameras) is essential for individuals to feel safe within a society, others feel it limits their freedom.

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