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Which of the following activities do you think will be the most beneficial to the environment? (1) Commute by biking or walking (2) Recycling (3) Eating a vegan diet

Which of the following activities do you think will be the most beneficial to the environment? (1) Commute by biking or walking (2) Recycling (3) Eating a vegan diet VB9bQ
In this present world, some people think when we do some activities such as walking we will support our earth. However, some believe that recycling is the most helpful, where others think the vegan diet is the most supportive way. This essay completely agrees with the suggestion that the commute by walking in the right activities that help our environment. In this essay, we will look at first in the benefits of walking as well as the disadvantages of recycling and eating vegan food. Firstly, we live in the technology world, every single duty we have as almost done by the technology as well as spend a lot of time in social media application, which may make us doing a few sports in our day. For instance, if we totally depend on walking and biking to go from home to the work, that will help our body to be healthier, as that kind of daily sports will help to reduce the blood pressure furthermore, being in a good mood which means good mentality too. Secondly, there are many disadvantages to totally eating a vegan diet. For example, the health state for some people not allowed them to feed by this kind of diet as their body needs to supply by meet, fresh or at least eggs. However, the side effects on their body will be so harsh, and we can not help and support our environment by affecting our health. The recycling, may help our earth but in restricted condition. Such as using the right way to recycle thing by limiting the contamination in the air, which my produced by some industry processing. In conclusion, we need to help our earth to be good to our next generation, we own the land now but after many years we do not, hopefully, leave it with less damage. I recommended using daily sports in our lives and looking for the better thing to raise the quality of our life also help our lands be clean and healthy.
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when we do
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activities such as walking we will support our earth.
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,
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some
believe that recycling is the most helpful, where others
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think
the vegan diet is the most supportive way. This essay completely
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with the suggestion that the commute by walking in the right activities that
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help
our environment. In this essay, we will look at
first
in the benefits of walking
as well
as the disadvantages of recycling and eating vegan food.

Firstly
, we
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live
in the technology world, every single duty we have as almost done by the technology
as well
as spend
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a lot of
time in social media application, which may
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make
us doing a few sports in our day.
For instance
, if we
totally
depend on walking and biking to go from home to the work, that will
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help
our body to be healthier, as that kind of daily sports will
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help
to
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reduce
the blood pressure
furthermore
, being in a
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good
mood which means
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mentality too.

Secondly
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disadvantages to
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so
harsh, and we can not
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help
and support our environment by affecting our health. The recycling, may
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help
our earth
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but
in restricted condition. Such as using the right way to recycle thing by limiting the contamination in the air, which my produced by
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some
industry processing.

In conclusion
, we need to
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help
our earth to be
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good
to our
next
generation, we
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now
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after
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leave
it with less damage. I recommended using daily sports in our
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lives
and looking for the better thing to raise the quality of our life
also
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help
our lands be clean and healthy.
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IELTS essay Which of the following activities do you think will be the most beneficial to the environment? (1) Commute by biking or walking (2) Recycling (3) Eating a vegan diet

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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