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whether to move to another planet

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Some of us think we should pour more money on finding a new planet suitable for human beings to live. I think it's a waste of money to search for a substitution and protecting the earth is more urgent. The reason why expenditure on space exploration should be reduced is that space programs cannot benefit the public in a short period. It requires lots of technology innovation to break through the current bottlenecks on such projects because we have been making efforts for decades but still have no substitutional results. For example, we have already landed on the moon and Mars but we cannot see any sign of life. If human beings want to move to Mars, it will take decades to generate essentials like oxygen and water to allow us to make a living on it. I believe that the money from space programs should go to earth protection. Citizens from all over the world can benefit from the improvement of climate conditions and there're maltitude ways to do it. For example, solar and wind power have been generally used in many countries like Germany and Netherland. With more government sponsorship, renewable energy can gradually be adapted by more nations. As a result, the reduction of greenhouse gases will improve the air conditioning thus benefit all of us. Such progress can lead to positive consequences in a relatively shorter time than that of moving to the Mars project. In conclusion, moving to another planet is not rational in current stage and the money spent on it should be transferred to the environmental protection in the earth.
Some
of us
think
we should pour more
money
on finding a new planet suitable for human beings to
live
. I
think
it's a waste of
money
to search for a substitution and protecting the earth is more urgent.

The reason why expenditure on space exploration should be
reduced
is that space programs cannot benefit the public in a short period. It requires lots of technology innovation to break through the
current
bottlenecks on such projects
because
we have been making efforts for decades
but
still
have no
substitutional
results.
For example
, we have already landed on the moon and Mars
but
we cannot
see
any
sign
of life. If human beings want to
move
to Mars, it will take decades to generate essentials like oxygen and water to
allow
us to
make
a living on it.

I believe that the
money
from space programs should go to earth protection. Citizens from all over the world can benefit from the improvement of climate conditions and there'
re maltitude
ways to do it.
For example
, solar and wind power have been
generally
used
in
many
countries like Germany and
Netherland
. With more
government
sponsorship, renewable energy can
gradually
be adapted
by more nations.
As a result
, the reduction of greenhouse gases will
improve
the air conditioning
thus
benefit all of us. Such progress can lead to
positive
consequences in a
relatively
shorter time than that of moving to the Mars project.

In conclusion
, moving to another planet is not rational in
current
stage and the
money
spent on it should
be transferred
to the environmental protection in the earth.
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IELTS essay whether to move to another planet

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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