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whether to learn history in school

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It is arguable whether to learn history or to learn more realistic subjects is more important. I believe that it is necessary for student to have curriculum related to real life, but the significance of history shouldn't be neglected. Learning history is essential to develop an understanding of the world and help form students' perception about the world. History is about what we have done in the past, by learning history events and what consequences the events caused, we can better understand the regular of the social development and how different current affairs can form a different kind of society. In such case, students could really understand what they should do to create a better future. For example, there were several times in China when the ancient emperor burnt all kinds of books and killed anyone who spoke against him, the ruin of culture and freedom speech always directly led to the end of the dynasty. At the same time, learning subject like accountance, biology and computer science that related to life is also of great importance as students finally need to face the real world and start their own career. If students don't learn any practical skills at school, they may find it hard to figure out what kind of job interests them the most and what major subject they should choose when enter the university. For example, a student who has never learnt biology will hardly consider occupations like the doctor or medicine researcher that related to it. In my opinion, students should learn both history and other more pratical subjects when they're in primary school and secondary school, when they are able to tell where their intersts are, they can decide to go further on which one. One of the most important purposes of education is to help student cultivate their life-long interest and then impart the related knowledge, if schools drop any important subjects without thorough consideration, students might not be able to realise their full potential.
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history
or to
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more realistic
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subjects
is more
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important
. I believe that it is necessary for
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student
to have curriculum
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related
to real life,
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but
the significance of
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history
shouldn't
be neglected
.

Learning
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history
is essential to develop an understanding of the world and
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help
form students' perception about the world.
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History
is about what we have done in the past, by learning
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history
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events
and what consequences the
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events
caused, we can better understand the regular of the social development and how
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different
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current
affairs can form a
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different
kind of society. In such case,
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students
could
really
understand what they should do to create a better future.
For example
, there were several times in China when the ancient emperor burnt all kinds of books and killed anyone who spoke against him, the ruin of culture and freedom speech always
directly
led to the
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end
of the dynasty.

At the same time, learning
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subject
like
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accountance
, biology and computer science that
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related
to life is
also
of great importance as
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students
finally
need to face the real world and
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start
their
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own
career. If
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students
don't
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learn
any practical
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skills
at
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school
, they may find it
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hard
to figure out what kind of job interests them the most and what major
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subject
they should choose when enter the university.
For example
, a
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student
who has never
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learnt
biology will hardly consider occupations like the doctor or medicine researcher that
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related
to it.

In my opinion,
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students
should
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learn
both
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history
and other more
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pratical
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subjects
when they're in primary
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school
and secondary
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school
, when they are able to
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tell
where their
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intersts
are, they can decide to go
further
on which one. One of the most
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important
purposes of education is to
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help
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student
cultivate their life-long interest and then impart the
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related
knowledge, if
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schools
drop any
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important
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subjects
without thorough consideration,
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students
might not be able to
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realise
their full potential.
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IELTS essay whether to learn history in school

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  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
6.0
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