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You asked me to describe a place where I like going shopping, so I'm going to talk about a department store in my town. It's called Judies and it's a very old store. In fact, it's about a 100 years old, so it's very famous. I would say that it's a landmark because everyone knows it. It's very large and spacious too, with four floors and more than 30 different departments to visit. You can find anything you want here, such as unusual presents for your friends, and you can buy really good food too. For example, you can buy traditional cakes and sweets that are famous in my area and they are delicious. It's an amazing shop but it's not cheap. In fact, it's one of the most expensive shops in the area. I think it's in a goodlocation because it's right in the centre of the town, which is very convenient. It's also veryclose to the railway station and a multi-storey car park too, so that's good for you if you have lots ofshoppingbags to carry. What do I like to do there? Well, I really like spending time in the jewellery department and thisis on the ground floor of the building. I love looking at the different rings and necklaces. I enjoy tF-ying them on too! I like gold jewellery the best but I can't afford it. Why do I like it so much? Well, I like the atmosphere in the store because it's very traditional. All the sales assistants are very friendly and helpful too. Yes, it's a really goodstore, so that's why I spend a lot of time in it!
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Judies


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store. In fact,
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about a 100 years
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,
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a landmark
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large and spacious too, with four floors and more than 30

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such as unusual presents for your friends, and you can
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really


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food too.
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, you can
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traditional cakes and
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sweets


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that
are
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in my area and they are delicious.
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amazing


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shop
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in


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town
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station and a
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jewellery
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I
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them


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the best
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much? Well, I like the atmosphere in the store

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because
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traditional. All the sales assistants are
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friendly


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helpful too. Yes,
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,
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IELTS essay where you like go shopping

Essay
  American English
23 paragraphs
275 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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