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When people move to another country some of them decided to follow their customs of some new countries other people prefer to keep their own culture compare both views and give your opinion.

When people move to another country some of them decided to follow their customs of some new countries other people prefer to keep their own culture compare both views and give your opinion. dq6M2
In modern era everyone move to foreign countries there are numerous of who who moved to abroad and number of citizen decided to living their and adapt the culture of aboard. On the contrary few people prefer to follow their own culture living in other nation I will discuss both view and will give me your pain in subsequent paragraphs. To embark with with first point of view there are numerous of people who go to another country to elaborate it a number of citizen go to another nation to continue their studies and work however they leave their around 2 to 4 years and under the influence of their culture the fall of foreign custom and living according to foreign nation the result is that they forget their on culture and tradition they do not attack their on culture by living in other nation moreover the mother tongue is also change their use language (way of communication) which is related to other country. Moving further which S point of view numerous individuals they move to abroad for fulfill their desired do not forget their culture and tradition owing the fact that with living in other countries the living according to their native customer for example when a girl living in foreign she used to wear the traditional clothes instead of Western clothes the result is that numerous people do not forget their custom by living in abroad. To sum up a number of people they moved to abroad they follow their custom of another nation few of them follow their own culture in another nation.
In modern era everyone
The pronoun 'everyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "moves", "moved".
move
to
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foreign
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countries
there are
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numerous
of
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who who
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moved
to
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abroad
and number of citizen decided to
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living
their and adapt the
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culture
of aboard.
On the contrary
few
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people
prefer to follow their
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own
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culture
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living
in
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other
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nation
I will discuss both view and will give me your pain in subsequent paragraphs. To embark
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with with
first
point of view there are
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numerous
of
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people
who go to another
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country
to elaborate it a number of citizen go to another
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nation
to continue their studies and work
however
they
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leave
their around 2 to 4 years and under the influence of their
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culture
the fall of
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foreign
custom and
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living
according to
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foreign
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nation
the result is that they forget their on
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culture
and tradition they do not attack their on
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culture
by
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living
in
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other
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nation
moreover
the mother tongue is
also
Consider using a past participle here: "changed".
change
their
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use
language (way of communication) which
is related
to
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other
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country
. Moving
further
which S point of view
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numerous
individuals they
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move
to
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abroad
for fulfill their desired do not forget their
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culture
and tradition owing the fact that with
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living
in
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other
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countries
the
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living
according to their native customer
for example
when a girl
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living
in
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foreign
she
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used
to wear the traditional clothes
instead
of Western clothes the result is that
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numerous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
do not forget their custom by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
in
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abroad
. To sum up a number of
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people
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
to
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abroad
they follow their custom of another
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nation
few of them follow their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
in another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
.
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IELTS essay When people move to another country some of them decided to follow their customs of some new countries other people prefer to keep their own culture compare both views and give your opinion.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
266 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
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