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What's the right age for parents to get their kids a cell phone? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

This task deals with the issue about the appropriate age a child can be given a cellular phone. I most likely think that the optimal age of issuing a phone to a child is about 18 years as children before this age are naive and can be exposed to risks posed by the usage of mobile phone. Firstly, making a smart phone available to children before the age of 18 can increase the risk a child experiences. Kids younger than 18 years lacks the knowledge of the dangers of social media and other online activities such as gaming, gambling etc. People belonging to the younger generation may find these activities amusing and often get addicted to gaming which highly effect them in a negative way. More over having little command over the pros and cons about the cellular phone may lead to ambiguity about the features that can be accessed and the one's that has to be left out. Further more teens can be often exposed to mature content on social media which can lead to highly disastrous results. One such example is a about a kid i read online who was 16 years old made a credit card purchase worth 1800$ without his parents consent. Secondly, at the age of 18 years children acquire a sense of resposibility as a child's brain is more mature when compared to earlier ages. At this suitable age getting a child his/her personal phone can give out fruitful results. Access of vast amount of information on internet is at fingertips. One such case is about a kid from my neighbourhood who with access to a smart phone taught himself complex mathematics concepts which ultimately resulted in him winning a state Math olympiad. In conclusion, it can be stated that children belonging to the category of below 18 years are too naive and inexperienced to be issued a smart phone. People above 18 years when given a cellular phone can bring out the creative side in them which can bring out impressive results.
This task deals with the issue about the appropriate
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can be
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given
a cellular
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phone
. I most likely
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think
that the optimal
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age
of issuing a
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phone
to a
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child
is about 18 years as
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children
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before
this
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age
are naive and can
be exposed
to
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risks
posed by the usage of mobile phone.

Firstly
, making a smart
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phone
available to
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children
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before
the
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age
of 18 can increase the
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risk
a
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child
experiences. Kids younger than 18 years lacks the knowledge of the
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dangers
of social media and other online activities such as gaming, gambling etc.
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People
belonging to the younger generation may find these activities amusing and
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often
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get
addicted to gaming which
highly
effect them in a
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negative
way. More over having
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little
command over the pros and cons about the cellular
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phone
may lead to ambiguity about the features that can
be accessed
and the one's that
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has to
be
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left
out.
Further
more teens can be
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often
exposed to mature content on social media which can lead to
highly
disastrous results. One such example is
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a
about a kid
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i
read online who was 16 years
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made a credit card
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purchase
worth
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: “$1800”.
1800$
without his parents consent.

Secondly
, at the
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age
of 18 years
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children
acquire a sense of
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resposibility
as a child's brain is more mature when compared to earlier
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ages
. At this suitable
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age
getting a
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child
his/her personal
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phone
can give out fruitful results. Access of vast amount of information on internet is at fingertips. One such case is about a kid from my
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neighbourhood
who with access to a smart
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phone
taught himself complex mathematics concepts which
ultimately
resulted in him winning a state Math
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olympiad
.

In conclusion
, it can
be stated
that
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children
belonging to the category of below 18 years are too naive and inexperienced to
be issued
a smart
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phone
.
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People
above 18 years when
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given
a cellular
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phone
can bring out the creative side in them which can bring out impressive results.
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IELTS essay What's the right age for parents to get their kids a cell phone?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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