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What problem old people face in the last stage of their life. Also suggest some solutions to deal with this problem.

What problem old people face in the last stage of their life. Also suggest some solutions to deal with this problem. APMpM
Old age is inevitable and it is not always easy for old people to survive comfortably in this phase of life because they suffer from different types of problems this essay will discuss that most gray people face financial and health problems in the last stage of their life and then describe how government and there families could help them to deal with this problem. The common problem that maximum elderly people encounter are related to finance and their health. In other words, they have no employment and money. Therefore, they depend on others. Furthermore, they frequently experience psychological disease and health diseases such as depression as well as joint pain. For example, recent studies have shown that more than 60% old people likely to suffer from depression, dementia and anxiety. Moreover, they feel loneliness when they enter in an old age. However, this problem could be solved with the help of both government and the families of old citizens. Firstly, family members should be merely obliged that they provide emotional support, love and care to them so that in this way they not feel isolated and homesickness. Moreover, the second solution to overcome this problem is that government ought to take the responsibility of individuals who are in the last stage of their life due to the fact that in this age grey people are not able to earn for themselves. Thus, government ought to provide funds, pension and accommodation to them so they can live relaxed and fullfill their basic needs. In conclusion, i strongly in favor of that when people enter in the evening of their life they suffer from financial constraints and health issues. There to alleviate this thread, elderly people should be given time from the busy schedule of family members however government should provide free medical care, pension and old age home for homeless elderly people.
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is inevitable and it is not always easy for
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to survive
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life
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because
they suffer from
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different
types of
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problems
this essay will discuss that most gray
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people
face financial and
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health
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problems
in the last stage of their
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life
and then
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describe
how
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government
and there
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families
could
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help
them to deal with this
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problem
. The common
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problem
that maximum elderly
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people
encounter
are related
to finance and their
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health
.
In other words
, they have no employment and money.
Therefore
, they depend on others.
Furthermore
, they
frequently
experience psychological disease and
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health
diseases such as depression
as well
as joint pain.
For example
, recent studies have shown that more than 60%
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old
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people
likely to suffer from depression, dementia and anxiety.
Moreover
, they feel loneliness when they enter in an
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old
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age
.
However
, this
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could
be solved
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help
of both
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government
and the
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families
of
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citizens.
Firstly
,
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family
members should be
merely
obliged that they provide emotional support,
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love
and care to them
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so
that in this way they not feel isolated and homesickness.
Moreover
, the second solution to overcome this
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problem
is that
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government
ought to take the responsibility of individuals who are in the last stage of their
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life
due to the fact that in this
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age
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grey
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people
are not able to earn for themselves.
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,
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government
ought to provide funds, pension and accommodation to them
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so
they can
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live
relaxed and
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fullfill
their basic needs.
In conclusion
, i
strongly
in favor of that when
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people
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enter in the evening
of their
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they suffer from financial constraints and
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health
issues. There to alleviate this thread, elderly
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people
should be
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given
time from the busy schedule of
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family
members
however
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government
should provide free medical care, pension and
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old
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age
home for homeless elderly
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people
.
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IELTS essay What problem old people face in the last stage of their life. Also suggest some solutions to deal with this problem.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
312 words
5.5
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