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. What person who is alive today would you most like to meet? Use reasons and details to support your response. v.1

. What person who is alive today would you most like to meet? Use reasons and details to support your response. v. 1
Over the last few years, many people opine that the traffic congestion problems have become worse in many cities due to the rapidly rising of cars on the roads. Personally, I agree with this argument in some extents. Therefore, the government should think about the solution to decrease the number of cars on the road in order to alleviate the traffic problems. There are several reasons that cause the traffic congestion. First of all, the price is cheaper than the past. In the past, the automobile was considered as a niche product, so only wealthy people can afford it. Nowadays, the price was cheaper because the technology improvement that reduce the production cost. Moreover, people have more ways to finance the purchase such as down payment. Another reason, the public transportation system does not cover all the areas of the city. Because of this, people have to interchange many public transports before reaching the destination, so people rather use their car than using public transport because it’s more convenient. In order to alleviate the traffic congestion, the government has to make the car on the road decrease by encourage to use public transport. Improving the transport structure to cover all areas of the city can increase commuters to use public system. Secondly, reduce the public transport price and increase the number of rides during rush hour. This way also persuades people to use the system because the lower cost and less time of travelling. In conclusion, the growth of car owners is giving a lot of traffic problems, but it can be solved by encouraging people to use an alternative way of transportation.
Over the last few years,
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many
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people
opine that the
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traffic
congestion problems have become worse in
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many
cities due to the
rapidly
rising of
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cars
on the roads.
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, I
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agree
with this argument in
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some
extents.
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, the
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government
should
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think
about the solution to decrease the number of
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cars
on the road in order to alleviate the
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traffic
problems.

There are several reasons that cause the
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traffic
congestion.
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First of all
, the price is cheaper than the past. In the past, the automobile
was considered
as a niche product,
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so
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only
wealthy
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people
can afford it. Nowadays, the price was cheaper
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because
the technology improvement that
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reduce
the production cost.
Moreover
,
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people
have more ways to finance the
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purchase
such as down payment. Another reason, the
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public
transportation system does not cover all the areas of the city.
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,
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people
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have to
interchange
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public
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transports
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before
reaching the destination,
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so
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rather
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their
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car
than using
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public
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transport
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because
it’s more convenient.

In order to alleviate the
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traffic
congestion, the
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government
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has to
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make
the
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on the road decrease by encourage to
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use
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public
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transport
. Improving the
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transport
structure to cover all areas of the city can increase commuters to
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use
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public
system.
Secondly
,
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reduce
the
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public
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transport
price and increase the number of rides during rush hour. This way
also
persuades
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people
to
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use
the system
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because
the lower cost and less time of travelling.

In conclusion
, the growth of
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car
owners is giving
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a lot of
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traffic
problems,
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but
it can
be solved
by encouraging
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people
to
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use
an alternative way of transportation.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay . What person who is alive today would you most like to meet? Use reasons and details to support your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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