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What makes someone a good role model

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Being a good role model means being committed to the good qualities that certainly make you an example in society, such as being confident, having high moral values, being respectful and positive, but above all be confident in yourself. A person who wants to be a good role model must pay attention to every movement, word, or behavior; because people’s attention is directed at him. A good role model should be volunteering and like to support people and try to help them even with the smallest tasks. this can make a real difference in the lives of people.
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IELTS essay What makes someone a good role model

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
98 words
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