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What is your short-term career goal and why?

What is your short-term career goal and why? J3Ep5
Following the completion of an MBA, I intend to minimize carbon emissions across a wide range of companies to move toward a net-zero carbon emission future. To accomplish this, I hope to serve as a management consultant in ESG planning and investing, identifying opportunities for improved operations within client’s existing systems. I have found great satisfaction working as a natural gas pipeline engineer and reducing carbon emissions through my daily work. The aging and leaking gas pipelines that I calculate risk and design replacement projects for would otherwise emit fugitive methane emissions to the atmosphere indefinitely. My daily work provides real and immediate impacts for carbon emissions reductions. I want to continue identifying areas where operations can be adjusted to reduce waste and eliminate carbon emissions; however, I intend to expand the scope of my impact. Working as a consultant in ESG planning and investing, I would have the opportunity to drive these changes across companies and industries. I aim to provide solutions for a net-zero future by bettering current practices to curb existing carbon emissions. My past experience has prepared me to take on these projects and would support me in my short-term goal of becoming an environmental consultant.
Following the completion of an MBA, I intend to minimize
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carbon
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emissions
across a wide range of
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companies
to
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move
toward a net-zero
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carbon
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emission
future. To accomplish this, I hope to serve as a management consultant in
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ESG
planning and investing, identifying opportunities for
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improved
operations within client’s existing systems.

I have found great satisfaction working as a natural gas pipeline engineer and reducing
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carbon
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emissions
through my daily work. The aging and leaking gas pipelines that I calculate
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risk
and design replacement projects for would
otherwise
emit fugitive methane
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emissions
to the atmosphere
indefinitely
. My daily work provides real and immediate impacts for
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carbon
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emissions
reductions. I want to continue identifying areas where operations can
be adjusted
to
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reduce
waste and eliminate
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carbon
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emissions
;
however
, I intend to expand the scope of my impact. Working as a consultant in
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ESG
planning and investing, I would have the opportunity to drive these
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changes
across
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companies
and industries.

I aim to provide solutions for a net-zero future by bettering
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current
The verb 'practices' is used with the gerund form: "practices curbing".
practices to curb
existing
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carbon
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emissions
. My
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past experience
has prepared me to take on these projects and would support me in my short-term goal of becoming an environmental consultant.
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IELTS essay What is your short-term career goal and why?

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