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What is the most memorable meal you have had? Describe the experience of eating this meal. Use details v.2

What is the most memorable meal you have had? Describe the experience of eating this meal. Use details v. 2
It is frequently argued by some people that employees should dress appropriately while others believe that the quality of the work is more important. This essay will discuss both the views if dressing or quality of work which more beneficial for the companies. In my opinion, I believe that dress of an employee depends on the type of work he does and if he is good in that work he must be valued. On the one hand, having proper neat and clean attire in office is a great way of showing respect towards the work. It displays professionalism of the worker and helps him to build a confidence and a sense of trust in the minds of his employers and client. To give a clear example, of a lawyer is wearing a beach clothing like T-shirt and short pant during his courtroom trial will not only detriment his value moreover it shows he doesn't value his profession. On the other hand, not every job type requires to have a suit and tie, it depends how the worker performs his duty. For instance, if a construction work is drilling the road wearing a nice suit and shiny pair of boot, wearing such clothes he cannot work properly but also his cloths will get dirty. In addition, people doing menial work cannot afford to buy branded clothes. In conclusion, wearing an appropriate clothing during the job is preferred by some organisations while others look at the skills. I believe people should be free to decide their attire at work as it depends on the type of work while employers should look at the skills and dedication of the employees
It is
frequently
argued by
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some
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people
that employees should dress
appropriately
while others believe that the quality of the
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work
is more
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important
. This essay will discuss both the views if dressing or quality of
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work
which more beneficial for the
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companies
. In my opinion, I believe that dress of an employee depends on the type of
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work
he does and if he is
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good
in that
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work
he
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must
be valued
.

On the one hand, having proper neat and clean attire in office is a great way of showing respect towards the
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work
. It displays professionalism of the worker and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
him to build a confidence and a sense of trust in the minds of his employers and client. To give a
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clear
example, of a lawyer is wearing a beach clothing like T-shirt and short pant during his courtroom trial will not
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only
detriment his value
moreover
it
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shows
he doesn't value his profession.

On the other hand
, not every job type requires to have a suit and tie, it
The verb 'to depend' requires the preposition '(up)on': "depends on".
depends
how the worker performs his duty.
For instance
, if a construction
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work
is drilling the road wearing a nice suit and shiny
Possible agreement error. The noun 'boot' seems to be countable; consider using: "pair of boots".
pair of boot
, wearing such clothes he cannot
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work
properly
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but
also
his cloths will
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get
dirty.
In addition
,
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people
doing menial
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work
cannot afford to
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buy
branded clothes.

In conclusion
, wearing an appropriate clothing during the job
is preferred
by
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some
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisations' is British English.
organisations
while others look at the
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skills
. I believe
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should be free to decide their attire at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
as it depends on the type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
while employers should look at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and dedication of the
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employees
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay What is the most memorable meal you have had? Describe the experience of eating this meal. Use details v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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