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What is one thing you would change about Mongolia?

What is one thing you would change about Mongolia? BgG8j

If I could change one thing about the Mongolia, I would eliminate human greed. Human greed is at the core of most of our world’s biggest problems. Greed is like a newborn seed that grows into a poisonous vine, eventually dominating the human soul like an infectious disease, spreading to every corner of society. Ultimately, blinding us from the truth. We refused to see the repercussions of pollution. Our greed blinded us from this reality. Global warming exists because of our greed. We were greedy and wanted more goods, so we built more factories. We saw coal as a cheap and effective energy source therefore our factories started using coal which creates pollution. Pollution in turn causes global warming. Instead of being greedy, we should all be more kind and caring towards others.

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change
 one thing about the Mongolia, I would eliminate human You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlonginghungeravariceexcessselfishnessgluttony
greed
. Human You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlonginghungeravariceexcessselfishnessgluttony
greed
 is at the core of most of our world’s biggest problems. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlonginghungeravariceexcessselfishnessgluttony
Greed
 is like a newborn seed that grows into a poisonous vine, eventually
 dominating the human soul like an infectious disease, spreading to every corner of society. Ultimately
, blinding us from the truth. We refused to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 the repercussions of pollution. Our You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlonginghungeravariceexcessselfishnessgluttony
greed
 blinded us from this reality. Global warming exists This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of our You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlonginghungeravariceexcessselfishnessgluttony
greed
. We were greedy and wanted more This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 we built more factories. We This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 coal as a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :economical
cheap
 and effective energy source therefore
 our factories This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 using coal which creates pollution. Pollution in turn causes global warming. Instead
 of being greedy, we should all be more kind and caring towards others. 