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What is main thought of statement of purpose

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I have always been passionate about laws since my childhood. One of the interesting childhood memories of mine is that i used to play a judge and make sound "order order” while playing with my childhood friends. When I started growing up, I found my passion was really about helping less fortunate people. Considering all these factors, I made a decision to pursue a career in the social work field which compels me to study law. I have also observed that the subjects focus on entire society, as well as people’s problems. Furthermore, I noticed one thing effectively that in my society, many educated people do not raise their voice against injustice and unlawful activities, on the contrary, I want to help people to get justice and take action against the violence of lawful activities. Nowadays, in many societies, women are expected to be submissive and quiet about their fundamental rights. I eagerly want to help those women about their rights and help to take action against abusive partners as well.
I have always been passionate about laws since my childhood. One of the interesting childhood memories of mine is that
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used
to play a judge and
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make
sound
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order order
” while playing with my childhood friends. When I
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started
growing up, I found my passion was
really
about helping less fortunate
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people
. Considering all these factors, I made a decision to pursue a career in the social work field which compels me to study law. I have
also
observed that the subjects focus on entire society,
as well
as
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people’s
problems.
Furthermore
, I noticed one thing
effectively
that in my society,
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many
educated
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people
do not raise their voice against injustice and unlawful activities,
on the contrary
, I want to
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help
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
justice and take action against the violence of lawful activities. Nowadays, in
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many
societies, women are
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expected
to be submissive and quiet about their fundamental rights. I
eagerly
want to
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help
those women about their rights and
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help
to take action against abusive partners
as well
.
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IELTS essay What is main thought of statement of purpose

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
171 words
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