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What has been my most memorable vacation?

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I never knew that just a one province in Mongolia has a beautiful nature, high mountains, dense forests and enormous lakes while having golden deserts with variety of wild animals. During the two years in quarantine, I haven’t travelled to anywhere except going to my uncle’s farm in the countryside. One morning, mom was talking on the phone saying “we are going one a vacation. ” I was curious, and asked her what she was talking. She said we are traveling. Everything is packed, ready for the travel, we went with the other friends’ families. After 2 days of road trip, visiting 3 provinces, we finally reached to our final destination. First, we visited medical lake which heals anyone who swims in it. I still remember the scenery of people playing, setting a campfire, preparing food and building their tent, the sun was setting, the lake was flowing slowly. I met with other kids and played volleyball which was one of only two possible games. Next day, we went to “Ikh dayn” mountain, located behind the “Otgontenger”, a strictly protected, preserved mountain. When seeing the dominant view of the ice mountain, I felt vast amount of spiritual energy. We got some of the energy that it was releasing. The final day, we got to Khar lake. At first sight on a mountain top, I saw a superior oasis that consists of forests, grasses and deserts in the north and a colossal (consisting transparent shore with deep water) lake. It has a mysterious enchantment that can relieve stress, heal both mental and physical pain. Relaxing at there, I felt peace.
I never knew that
just
a one province in Mongolia has a
beautiful
nature, high
mountains
, dense forests and enormous
lakes
while having golden deserts with variety of wild animals.

During the two years in quarantine, I haven’t travelled to anywhere except going to my uncle’s farm in the countryside.

One morning, mom was talking on the phone saying “we are going one a vacation. ” I was curious, and asked her what she was talking. She said we are traveling.

Everything
is packed
, ready for the travel, we
went with
the other friends’ families. After 2 days of road trip, visiting 3 provinces, we
finally
reached to our final destination.

First
, we visited medical
lake
which heals anyone who swims in it. I
still
remember the scenery of
people
playing, setting a campfire, preparing food and building their tent, the sun was setting, the
lake
was flowing
slowly
. I met with other kids and played volleyball which was one of
only
two possible games.

Next
day, we went to “
Ikh
dayn
mountain
, located behind the “
Otgontenger
”, a
strictly
protected, preserved
mountain
. When seeing the dominant view of the ice
mountain
, I felt vast amount of spiritual energy. We
got
some of the
energy that it was releasing.

The final day, we
got
to
Khar
lake
. At
first
sight on a
mountain
top, I
saw
a superior oasis that consists of forests, grasses and deserts in the north and a colossal (consisting transparent shore with deep water)
lake
. It has a mysterious enchantment that can relieve
stress
, heal both mental and physical pain. Relaxing at there, I felt peace.
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IELTS essay What has been my most memorable vacation?

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269 words
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