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What does the expression" good things come to those who wait" mean to you, and how have you seen this in your own life. Use details and examples to illustrate your response. v.1

What does the expression" good things come to those who wait" mean to you, and how have you seen this in your own life. Use details and examples to illustrate your response. v. 1
There is an ongoing debate about the best time for children to be equipped with foreign languages and some people believe that the optimum time is when they are in primary school. Although there are demerits associated with them acquiring knowledge of non-indigenous languages, I believe it is more beneficial owing to the fact that they absorb information easily at this stage and primary level is the learning acquisition stage for them. Admittedly, a major drawback of young ones learning international languages in elementary school is that a lot of people think children should focus on things in their level first. In other words, they should learn the primary things like colours, shapes, letters and numbers and should not be burdened with the task of learning imported languages. Additionally, little ones may confuse languages if they try to learn their indigenous language and foreign ones at the same time. Nevertheless, there are a lot of benefits which surpasses the drawbacks above and one of them is the fact that youngsters at a tender age absorb information easily. It is no doubt that children are able to learn a lot when they are young as scientists have likened their brains to a sponge meaning that they can absorb anything. Furthermore, the elementary level is the prime stage for learning languages due to the fact it is a learning acquisition stage. For instance, a study carried out in Sweden by The Educationists in 2011, showed that children learn foreign languages better at primary level. In conclusion, although the major disadvantage of youngsters learning external languages in grade school is that they should focus on learning little things that matter, the advantages are too important to be overlooked.
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languages
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some
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people
believe that the optimum time is when they are in
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primary
school. Although there are demerits associated with them acquiring knowledge of non-indigenous
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languages
, I believe it is more beneficial owing to the fact that they absorb information
easily
at this
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stage
and
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primary
level is the
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learning
acquisition
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stage
for them.

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, a major drawback of young
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ones
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learning
international
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languages
in elementary school is that
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people
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think
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children
should focus on things in their level
first
.
In other words
, they should
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learn
the
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primary
things like
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colours
, shapes, letters and numbers and should not
be burdened
with the task of
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learning
imported
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languages
.
Additionally
,
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little
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ones
may confuse
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if they try to
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learn
their indigenous
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language
and foreign
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ones
at the same time.

Nevertheless
, there are
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a lot of
benefits which surpasses the drawbacks above and one of them is the fact that youngsters at a tender age absorb information
easily
. It is no doubt that
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children
are able to
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learn
a lot when they are young as scientists have likened their brains to a sponge meaning that they can absorb anything.
Furthermore
, the elementary level is the prime
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stage
for
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learning
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languages
due to the fact it is a
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learning
acquisition
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stage
.
For instance
, a study carried out in Sweden by The Educationists in 2011,
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showed
that
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children
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learn
foreign
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languages
better at
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primary
level.

In conclusion
, although the major disadvantage of youngsters
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learning
external
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languages
in grade school is that they should focus on
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learning
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little
things that matter, the advantages are too
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important
to
be overlooked
.
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IELTS essay What does the expression" good things come to those who wait" mean to you, and how have you seen this in your own life. Use details and examples to illustrate your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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