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What are the good characteristics of a good parent? Use reasons and details tosupport your response. v.1

What are the good characteristics of a good parent? Use reasons and details tosupport your response. v. 1
It is considered by many that more and more people are addicted on the telecommunications. This is a positive development. In this essay will be discussed both sides, first the positive one which is based on the most unique way how people communicate in crisis times, following by the unlikely risk that users face when contact with fake information. Being depends on internet and phone is a positive development, thereby in dark times will help to overcome the feeling of isolation. This means that keeping connected with online, whether by phone or computer, ones can work from home, having meetings, interconnected with family, friends, as well as studying. When an individual has to be isolated from the world, he will struggle due to the fact that all human beings must communicate in a certain way. For example, in these days we are passing through industrious crisis, Coronavirus, which made citizens’ worldwide scale stayed at home far away from their families, friends and families, whereby of internet, phones and computers, those ones could communicate through a click. In contrast, the negative development of individuals’ dependency happened by virtue to the fact that the using unknown conduction’s information. When doing so the users do not know how to approach the best practices to search and filter the data, sourcing and identities it, such as BBC, Universities, and other sources safety sources. For instance, the social network called Facebook could not control all of the fake news had been shared by millions of people. The measures which were taken were double damages, first make people believe they can leave them home to have celebrations among families and friends and also broke law rules in order to proceed all of population save. In conclusion, there are as many positive as negative arguments of phones and internet dependency. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of knowing how to control themselves in terms of what is read and how to filter it. After through analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the positive effects of the debate over telecommunications sector dependency will always be greater than the adverse effects, and because of this, there are no way to turn the system back.
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is considered
by
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many
that more and more
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people
are addicted
on the telecommunications. This is a
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positive
development. In this essay will
be discussed
both sides,
first
the
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positive
one which
is based
on the
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most unique
way how
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people
communicate in crisis times, following by the unlikely
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risk
that users face when contact with fake information.

Being depends on internet and
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phone
is a
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positive
development, thereby in dark times will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to overcome the feeling of isolation. This means that keeping connected with online, whether by
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phone
or computer,
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ones
can work from home, having meetings, interconnected with
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family
, friends,
as well
as studying. When an individual
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has to
be isolated
from the world, he will struggle due to the fact that all human beings
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must
communicate in a certain way.
For example
, in these days we are passing through industrious crisis, Coronavirus, which made citizens’ worldwide scale stayed at home far away from their
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families
, friends and
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families
, whereby of internet,
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phones
and computers, those
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ones
could communicate through a click.

In contrast
, the
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negative
development of individuals’ dependency happened by virtue to the fact that the using unknown conduction’s information. When doing
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so
the users do not know how to approach the best
The verb 'practices' is used with the gerund form: "practices searching".
practices to search
and filter the data, sourcing and identities it, such as BBC, Universities, and other sources safety sources.
For instance
, the social network called Facebook could not control
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all of the
fake news had
been shared
by millions of
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people
. The measures which
were taken
were double damages,
first
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make
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people
believe they can
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leave
them home to have celebrations among
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families
and friends and
also
broke law
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rules
in order to proceed
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all of population
save.

In conclusion
, there are as
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many
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positive
as
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negative
arguments of
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phones
and internet dependency.
Therefore
, it is
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clear
that the
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idea
of knowing how to control themselves in terms of what
is read
and how to filter it. After through analysis on this subject, it
is predicted
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
positive
effects of the debate over telecommunications sector dependency will always be greater than the adverse effects, and
because of this
, there are no way to turn the system back.
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IELTS essay What are the good characteristics of a good parent? Use reasons and details tosupport your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
368 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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