Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

What are the disadvantages and advantages related to people living in different places or staying in one place.

What are the disadvantages and advantages related to people living in different places or staying in one place. mbORA
In the past people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. Of course there are advantages and disadvantages of both. Let’s look at them. First of all, people who stayed in one place throughout their life had more reel friends. Because they knew each others for a long time. They belonged in there. Knew who lived there, knew places at there. However they weren’t saw new places because of that they couldn’t met different people much. They couldn’t had idea of them. Also they didn’t knew inside of the other places. To continue with people who lived in several different places in their lifetime. Good things about them was met different peoples in different places. They learned different sides of this places and maybe new languages. But they couldn’t belonged in somewhere. They couldn’t had reel connection with other peoples much. In my opinion stayed in one place throughout my lifetime is a better option. When you stayed in one place you can go on a vacation and see different places like that.
In the past
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
usually
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stayed
in one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
throughout their life. These days
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
around. They
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
in their lifetime.
Of course
there are advantages and disadvantages of both.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
’s look at them.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stayed
in one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
throughout their life had more reel friends.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knew
each
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "other"?
others
for a long time. They belonged in there.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Knew
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lived
there,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knew
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
at there.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
However
they weren’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of that they couldn’t
The verb 'couldn't' requires base form of this verb: "meet"
met
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
much. They couldn’t
The verb 'couldn't' requires base form of this verb: "have"
had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of them.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
they didn’t
The verb 'didn't' requires base form of this verb: "know"
knew
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "inside".
inside of
the other places.

To continue with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lived
in several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
in their lifetime.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Good
things about them
was met
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
peoples
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
. They learned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
sides of
Did you mean "these"?
this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
and maybe new languages.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
they couldn’t
The verb 'couldn't' requires base form of this verb: "belong"
belonged
in somewhere. They couldn’t
The verb 'couldn't' requires base form of this verb: "have"
had
reel connection with other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
peoples
much.

In my opinion
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stayed
in one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
throughout my lifetime is a better option. When you
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stayed
in one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
you can go on a vacation and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
like that.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay What are the disadvantages and advantages related to people living in different places or staying in one place.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
190 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 6.5band
    Should sugary products be more expensive?
    Numerous products cause health problem nowadays, which contains high-level of sugars making some people believe that the prices should increase for the benefit of the majority. In my opinion, health should always come first before one’s satisfaction specifically in sugary foods and drinks. Therefore...
  • 6.5band
    Should sugary foods and drinks be more expensive?
    Numerous products cause health problem nowadays, which contains high-level of sugars making some people believe that the prices should increase for the benefit of the majority. In my opinion, health should always come first before one’s satisfaction specifically in sugary foods and drinks. Therefore...
  • 6band
    Governments should spend money rather than roads. What extend do you agree
    In this day and age, in order to catch up with the times, the governments have to upgrade their countries' infrastructure. Indeed, money is an indepensable need for their purposes. Railways has irrefutably become common in daily life, but in my viewpoint, spending money on road systems is more essen...
  • 6band
    Ethical and legal issues of surrogate pregnancy
    Motherhood is the most beautiful and divine gift to a woman. Every woman has a dream and a natural instinct that she will become a mother and nurture a baby. Unfortunately for some couples fulfilling this dream becomes impossible due to medical reasons. In such cases, the concept of surrogacy has ev...
  • 6band
    As global population is increasing and And providing food to such a myriad number
    As global population is increasing and And providing food to such a myriad number of individuals has become a burgeoning issue. . A numerous people believe that genetically modified food is the only way to feed the globe. I partially agree with the said notion. This essay is going to articulate both...
  • 6band
    many offender commmit more crimes more crimes even after serving punishment. causes and solution s of this problem?
    It is believed that nowadays most of the prisoners do a lot of wrong incidents even after spendin their time in prison by serving penalty. This essay will discuss the reason for this issue and give some solution to overcome this problrm. Firstly, many people go to prisons as the act of commiting so...





Get more results for topic:
  • What are the disadvantages and advantages related to people living in different places or staying in one place.