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What are the advantages of charities?

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There is a common believes that difference which is between poor people and the rich people is increasing. Some say devoting money for reduce poverty by charity is accountable and useful for person who is acceptor. While a growing number of humanity believe that it me be harmful for a poor range of people. In this essay, I even look at both sides of the argument and give my opinion. On the one hand it is argued by some say that charity is an easy method of cutting poorness. Governance is accustomed to sit doing this kind of drawbacks by charity. Taking out as an example People who have excess wealth throw paper money to boxes of charity or transfer by online wallets also charity searches and finds needy range of persons. Multitude of people suppose that it helps to destroy polarity So they they would like to devote money. it has been tested my a lot of countries and they have own reputable charities. On the other hand, there is also an argument that, charities will be able to be a reason to other issues which depend on money in the future. If charities continue own work activities, poor range of people will become idler. Hence they will stuff further by some problems like financial condition when contributors stop to devote money. So some people dislike to suppose them. To sum up, there are harmful sides and benefits of giving help by charity. Personally, I think people should not stop to give money to poverty. Also government must create opportunities for charities. In my view if it goes on, in the future I hope we will loose poorness.
There is a common believes that difference which is between poor
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people
and the rich
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people
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is
increasing.
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Some
say devoting
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money
for
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reduce
poverty by
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charity
is accountable and useful for person who is acceptor. While a growing number of humanity believe that it me be harmful for a poor range of
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people
. In this essay, I even look at both sides of the argument and give my opinion.

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is argued
by
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some
say that
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charity
is an easy method of cutting poorness. Governance is
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accustomed to sit
doing this kind of drawbacks by
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charity
. Taking out as an example
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People
who have excess wealth throw paper
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money
to boxes of
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charity
or transfer by online wallets
also
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charity
searches and finds needy range of persons. Multitude of
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people
suppose that it
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helps
to
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destroy
polarity
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So
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would like to devote
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money
.
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it
has been
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tested
my
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a lot of
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countries and
they have
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own
reputable charities.

On the other hand
, there is
also
an argument that,
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charities
will be able to be a reason to other issues which depend on
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money
in the future. If
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charities
continue
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own
work activities, poor range of
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people
will become idler.
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Hence
they will stuff
further
by
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some
problems like financial condition when contributors
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stop
to devote
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money
.
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So
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some
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people
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dislike to suppose
them.

To sum up, there are harmful sides and benefits of giving
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help
by
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charity
.
Personally
, I
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think
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people
should not
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stop
to give
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money
to poverty.
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Also
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government
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must
create opportunities for
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charities
. In my view if it goes on, in the future I hope we will
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loose
poorness.
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IELTS essay What are the advantages of charities?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
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