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what are the advandtages and disadvandtages of studying online courses? v.1

what are the advandtages and disadvandtages of studying online courses? v. 1
The year is 2020. Technology is, with a nauseating speed, finding its way into all aspects of life. In the confusing midst of such advances, oppositions have risen, arguing about whether we should embrace the changes, or remain to the safer, traditional way. This is also the case for education. Online courses, which is gaining traction recently due to the COVID-19 pandemic, have also opened up a debate about its pros and cons. In this essay, I aim to analyse both sides of the coin, state my opinion about the matter, and you, the reader, shall decide which side will gain your favour. Let us start with the advantages. Firstly, online courses surpass traditional courses in its flexibility. This flexibility lies in three keywords: when, how, where. Specifically, the student gets to dictate the best time, the best way of learning, and their favourable place (often their home), thus enabling the student to work in the most efficient way. Secondly, ease of access in online course is one of its forte. Only needing a computer (or maybe a tablet or smartphone as a budget alternative) with an internet connection, and you’re good to go! Study materials are sent through email or messages, and classes are held through apps like Skype or Discord. This opens up the potential for learners all around the world, no longer suffering the problem of distance. Last but not least, online courses may train one in self-discipline and responsibility. One can only enjoy the vast benefits of online courses once they have fully committed to it – maintaining the study schedule, pay undivided attention, etc. , thus training their mental capabilities. On the other hand, online courses are not without flaws. Firstly, there might be little to no face-to-face interaction. An English professor argued that online education creates “a monologue, not a real conversation” in the learning environment, and that is nothing to take lightly. This fact might impact students’ performance. Secondly, online courses seem like they require more work. To speak from personal experience, the workload while we have to stay at home is greater than normal. With online studying, students have to do much more to prove that they have mastered the knowledge. This isn’t necessarily a disadvantage, but still worth mentioning in my opinion. Finally, remember the aforementioned benefit about self-discipline and responsibility? It proved itself to be quite the double-edged blade: without those qualities, an online course will inevitably fail, no matter how good the teacher is. In conclusion, it is clear that online courses are great, but not without its weak points. Personally, I would certainly applaud the idea of online learning (despite the extra workload), as a study has shown that “on average, students in online learning conditions performed better than those receiving face-to-face instruction. ” But of course, the final decision still belongs to you to make. Choose wisely.
The year is 2020. Technology is, with a nauseating speed, finding its way into all aspects of life. In the confusing midst of such advances, oppositions have risen, arguing about whether we should embrace the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
, or remain to the safer, traditional way. This is
also
the case for education.
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Online
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courses
, which is gaining traction recently due to the COVID-19 pandemic, have
also
opened up a debate about its pros and cons. In this essay, I aim to
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analyse
both sides of the coin, state my opinion about the matter, and you, the reader, shall decide which side will gain your
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favour
.

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Let
us
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start
with the advantages.
Firstly
,
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online
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courses
surpass traditional
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courses
in its flexibility. This flexibility lies in three keywords: when, how, where.
Specifically
, the
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student
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gets
to dictate the best time, the best way of
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learning
, and their
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favourable
place (
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often
their home),
thus
enabling the
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student
to work in the most efficient way.
Secondly
,
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ease
of access in
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online
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course
is one of its forte.
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Only
needing a computer (or maybe a tablet or smartphone as a budget alternative) with an internet connection, and you’re
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good
to go! Study materials are
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sent
through email or messages, and classes
are held
through apps like Skype or Discord. This opens up the potential for learners all around the world, no longer suffering the problem of distance. Last
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but
not least,
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online
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courses
may train one in self-discipline and responsibility. One can
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only
enjoy the vast benefits of
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online
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courses
once they have
fully
committed to it
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–
maintaining the study schedule, pay undivided attention, etc.
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,
thus
training their mental capabilities.

On the other hand
,
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online
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courses
are not without flaws.
Firstly
, there might be
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little
to no face-to-face interaction. An English professor argued that
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online
education creates “a monologue, not a real conversation” in the
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learning
environment, and
that is
nothing to take
lightly
. This fact might impact
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students’
performance.
Secondly
,
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online
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courses
seem like they require more work. To speak from personal experience, the workload while we
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have to
stay at home is greater than normal. With
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online
studying,
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students
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have to
do much more to prove that they have mastered the knowledge. This isn’t
necessarily
a disadvantage,
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but
still
worth mentioning in my opinion.
Finally
, remember the aforementioned benefit about self-discipline and responsibility? It proved itself to be quite the double-edged blade: without those qualities, an
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online
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course
will
inevitably
fail, no matter how
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good
the teacher is.

In conclusion
, it is
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clear
that
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online
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courses
are great,
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but
not without its weak points.
Personally
, I would
certainly
applaud the
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idea
of
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online
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learning
(despite the extra workload), as a study has shown that “on average,
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students
in
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online
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learning
conditions performed better than those receiving face-to-face instruction. ”
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But
of
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course
, the final decision
still
belongs to you to
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make
. Choose
wisely
.
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33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay what are the advandtages and disadvandtages of studying online courses? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
480 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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