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What are some of advantage and/or disadvantages of having three or more generation of family living together in one house? use details and examples in your answer v.1

What are some of advantage and/or disadvantages of having three or more generation of family living together in one house? use details and examples in your answer v. 1
Now days online shopping is becoming more prevalent for purchasing commodities such as books, travel tickets and groceries. This is essay will suggest that online purchasing is a positive development and benefits of this outweigh the drawbacks. Firstly, it will discuss how online shopping improved buyers purchasing experience by saving their shopping time as primary benefit and Secondly, the unfavourable circumstance relevant to this trend. The most and prominent features of online shopping is saving time, and the consumer can make purchases from any place. That is to say, with a plethora of smartphone and tablets, it’s no longer required to drive to a shopping mall to buy a birthday gift or for wait in long queue to pay for groceries, instead with some click on a smartphone, shopping can be concluded in a few minutes, thus saving great moments and avoiding the hassle of shopping. For instance, Amazon provides a variety of commodities and consumer from any place in the globe can purchase and have the commodity shipped to their places that was very tedious task in the past. However, people become less interactive and seldom meet face to face. This is because people being dependent on technology for every aspect of life and neglecting social duties to friends and local community. For instance, going for shopping with a friend and having coffee at Starbucks will have a good effect to strengthen the relationships. As a result, people dropping the idea of shopping from regular stores and using technology like Facebook to meet and chat with friends and family. In Conclusion, online Shopping is enhancing our purchasing experience greatly by saving us time and effort, but, it deprives people from their community. However, online meeting programs such Facebook and Skype provided a means to stay connected with our friends and loved ones. Overall, the benefits of shopping online outweigh the drawbacks because most people will not solely depend on technology and human beings will always want human contact.
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Now
days
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online
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shopping
is becoming more prevalent for purchasing commodities such as books, travel tickets and groceries. This is essay will suggest that
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online
purchasing is a
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positive
development and benefits of this outweigh the drawbacks.
Firstly
, it will discuss how
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online
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shopping
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improved
buyers purchasing experience by
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saving
their
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shopping
time as primary benefit and
Secondly
, the
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unfavourable
circumstance relevant to this trend.

The most and prominent features of
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online
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shopping
is
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saving
time, and the consumer can
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make
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purchases
from any place.

That is
to say, with a plethora of smartphone and tablets, it’s no longer required to drive to a
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shopping
mall to
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buy
a birthday gift or for wait in long queue to pay for groceries,
instead
with
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some
click on a smartphone,
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shopping
can
be concluded
in a few minutes,
thus
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saving
great moments and avoiding the hassle of
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shopping
.
For instance
, Amazon provides a variety of commodities and consumer from any place in the globe can
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purchase
and have the commodity shipped to their places that was
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very
tedious task in the past.

However
,
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people
become less interactive and seldom
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meet
face to face. This is
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because
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people
being dependent on technology for every aspect of life and neglecting social duties to
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friends
and local community.
For instance
, going for
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shopping
with a
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friend
and having coffee at Starbucks will have a
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good
effect to strengthen the relationships.
As a result
,
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people
dropping the
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idea
of
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shopping
from regular stores and using technology like Facebook to
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meet
and chat with
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friends
and family.

In Conclusion
,
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online
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Shopping
is enhancing our purchasing experience
greatly
by
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saving
us time and effort,
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but
, it deprives
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people
from their community.

However
,
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online
meeting programs such Facebook and Skype provided a means to stay connected with our
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friends
and
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loved
ones.
Overall
, the benefits of
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shopping
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online
outweigh the drawbacks
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because
most
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people
will not
solely
depend on technology and human beings will always want human contact.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay What are some of advantage and/or disadvantages of having three or more generation of family living together in one house? use details and examples in your answer v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
329 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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