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WHAT ARE PROS AND CONS FOR CHILDREN OF WATCHING TV?

WHAT ARE PROS AND CONS FOR CHILDREN OF WATCHING TV? B7j9d
These days, in the fast-paced world, the serial appearance of top-notch equipment such as laptop, robot, smart-phone, … and television can be regarded as a pieces of technology dominates in the childhood of youngsters. Theoretically, as well all the technologies as, inventing television is for the humans’ beneficial, and serves for humans’ amusement, information, knowledge demand-related. Notwithstanding, to chidren, accompanied by the merits afore mentioned, there is a wave of watching television’s demerits. At some angles, watching television’s chidren undoubtedly brings a wave of benefits in both of direct and indirect approachs. This indoor activity provides a great deal of insights for them such as moral lessons, soft skills through cartoon, educational or animals programmes. A majority of parents or matures think that their child have a tendency to clean forget about what them have seen thought the fact is contrary to this. A series of research indicate that television programme can be seen as examples as well as parents action for children to follow. For instance, 12 months children after watching a music video they always try to imitate the actions appeared in this such as bouncing, singing… And parents just have to pay more attention in selecting television programmes for their kids to help them have ability to develop their human beings in a righteous way. Conversely, frequently uncontrolled watching with no under supervises of kid’s parents will brings a huge negative influences on both physical and metal health. There is a wealth of violence, war and crime movies published and showed on the TV annually. And the consequence which regurlar occurs is they will become a violent-lover, war freak or get worse is a perpetrator because they copy the rule characters in this movies. Besides, without a shadow of doubt, wasting a huge amount of time on television’s screen will induce bad affects on damaged your eyes such as serious myopia. On top of that, its also the culprit leads to headaches, stresses. To conclude, watching television not only brings an electic mix of positive influences of children but also induces various serious problems for them if insufficient parents consideration in teaching their kids.
These days, in the
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-paced world, the serial appearance of top-notch equipment such as laptop, robot, smart-phone, … and
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television
can
be regarded
as
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of technology dominates in the childhood of youngsters.
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,
as well
all the technologies as, inventing
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television
is for the humans’ beneficial, and serves for humans’ amusement, information, knowledge demand-related. Notwithstanding, to
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chidren
, accompanied by the merits
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afore
mentioned, there is a wave of watching
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television’s
demerits.

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television’s
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undoubtedly
brings a wave of benefits in both of direct and indirect
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. This indoor activity provides a great deal of insights for them such as moral lessons, soft
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skills
through cartoon, educational or animals
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programmes
. A majority of
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parents
or matures
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think
that their child have a tendency to clean forget about what them have
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seen
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thought
the fact is contrary to this. A series of research indicate that
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television
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programme
can be
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seen
as examples
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as
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action for children to follow.
For instance
, 12 months children after watching a music video they always try to imitate the actions appeared in this such as bouncing, singing… And
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parents
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just
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have to
pay more attention in selecting
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television
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programmes
for their kids to
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help
them have ability to develop their human beings
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in a righteous way
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Conversely
,
frequently
uncontrolled watching with
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no
under supervises of kid’s
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parents
will brings a huge
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negative
influences on both physical and metal health. There is a wealth of violence, war and crime movies published and
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showed
on the TV
annually
. And the consequence which
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occurs is they will become a violent-lover, war freak or
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get
worse is a perpetrator
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because
they copy the
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rule
characters in
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this
movies.
Besides
, without a shadow of doubt, wasting a huge amount of time on
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television’s
screen will induce
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bad
affects on damaged your eyes such as serious myopia.
On top of that
, its
also
the culprit leads to headaches,
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stresses
.

To conclude
, watching
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television
not
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brings an
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electic
mix of
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positive
influences of children
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but
also
induces various serious problems for them if insufficient
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parents
consideration in teaching their kids.
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IELTS essay WHAT ARE PROS AND CONS FOR CHILDREN OF WATCHING TV?

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  American English
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357 words
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